webnovel

Review Detail of TheSleepingCow in NARUTO GODS OF REWARD SYSTEM

Detalhe da revisão

TheSleepingCow
TheSleepingCowLv22yrTheSleepingCow

You need to work and your english. Also you haven’t developed any characters or world background. The idea and premise is good tho, You should fix the first chapter too. It’s all weird with how it cuts the phrases.

NARUTO GODS OF REWARD SYSTEM

Jelo_Bolivar

Curtido por 1 pessoas

GOSTAR

Respostas1

Jelo_Bolivar
Jelo_BolivarAutorJelo_Bolivar

Thanks for review, I'll try to fix it as soon as possible