This story is on to a good start. The characters have conflicts that makes people feel sad and feel for them. Good enough at least. The depth of the story and characters are lacking a little, but not enough to put off the readers. There are spelling and punctuation mistakes, but it's not too severe to confuse someone badly. In the end, keep it up! The story is good so far.
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