Review Detail of Jasonenrick in Back to the Beginning...

Writing Quality ~5 Stability of Updating ~5 Story Development ~3 Character Design ~2 World Background ~1 Here is my Review: The First two are self-explanatory, like usual! Story Development: The Story is generally really good but we skipped 7 years and a few months in 1 Chapter, seems a bit rushed even when the Chapters are really really long! You could have skipped a few months ever so often and tell what the Mc was doing ! We don't know anything of what happend in the 6 years between Anyway..... And the Telekinese is bull**** ! As If everybody has Telekinese but no one knows of it. It would have been Discoverd long before Harry! It makes No Sense at all. It would be okay If he were the only one to have it but he tells every Person he met how to get it ( close people but he nevertheless tells it nearly everyone he knows). Character Design : Well, I can't see how the Mc is our Harry Potter . The Mc is suddenly intelligent, Scheming etc etc . He is a Gentelman out of nowhere and intends to get a Harem ......the Harry I knew didn't even have the guts to Talk to girl... Then there is Ron, I don't like Ron, mind you but Ron is Harry's friend for 7 years and Harry knows him very well. And Harry suddenly calls Ron " a son of a Bitch" and tells him that he won't Talk to him ever again" And the best is, IT's because the Halloween Event that already happend before in the Life before this . He knew Ron's character ......and he acts like Ron has rape his mother, not like that's possible .... Snape is also written badly, like that's not Snape in any way ! Snape is a calm Person..and not whatever the Snape in this Fanfic is . World Background: It's HP ! Would have been 5 -Stars , I mean what is there to complain about but your Telekinese Made the World Background to 0% Review End! Ps: Keep in mind that I only read to Chapter 2, also English isn't my mother language!