Review Detail of LifeIsAboutChoices in A monster second chance

Story with good starting point but, the way author write kinda offset the good part. How should I say this.... the way author write this story make it hard for people (maybe only me) to understand, yes it's true you can understand it but, it takes quite an effort to piece information together. Maybe, it's because author is not a native english speaker. *sigh* Good luck.