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Mordukai
MordukaiLv135yr
2019-10-29 14:08

This is all I’m saying .MC 💩 .MC BRAIN 💩 .STORY DEVELOPMENT 💩 .Like come on you give twin spirit and yet they are both trash. Do you know what are the odds of getting twin spirit and yet they are both trash. I already had a bit of skepticism since you started off a Mc with support class like really and then you go and give him a second support class in which he can’t even choose what he wants to put. Not to mention the second one is to make his cultivation progress faster and yet he almost got his ass handed to him by the original Mc such a disappointment Anyone who gives this story a 5 star rating you are not only not helping improve the story but you are being kind of D*** to the rest of us that see the rating and think 🤔 well it might be good only to get n Mc that is trash.

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Torafor
ToraforLv4

Mc is all the problem here in this story of picaco *cough* but seriously you're correct in mc's Brain defensive style in the start of the story with a sword not balance between offense and defense.

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picaco
picacoAuthor

Here's the author doing a review of this already finished novel. I started writing this novel as my first time truly writing in English to improve it. The grammar and phrase construction is lacking at first, but as the novel advances, I improved in it, Grammarly was a great help. For the Stability of the updates, I finished writing 256 chapters after 10 months, almost a chapter for day as average. Is already finished so there's nothing much to say. About the story, at first it start with a lax and infantil writing, with a very crude English. The story being written day by day without, always changing what I had thought. This causes some plot holes over the novel that I closed maybe a little forcefully over the novel. What most people complained was about the loss of memory. Yes, there was and in chapter forty-something is explained the why. Read it thinking that he has no memories of the novel after his first ring. People also complained about his style that was control-defense, but why? With a team is a good style, being able to control the team, letting the others finish them. Then as the story advances, entering more the solo player mode, his style changes. Summarizing, I liked to write this story even facing against the hate. It starts a little poor and I am not too proud of it, only considering it as the improvement of the later parts. But, I am proud of the end, really liking how it finished. If you like OP characters that goes facepalming everyone, because it didn't matter anything because they are OP and untouchable, this isn't your novel. He grows stronger than his age, faving greater enemies but always with that might lose.

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