Pocket_AI

It's... ok. Nothing very good, but not too bad. The only problem is mc's constant praise that looks quite artificial and annoying. If you're adapting Chinese fic - you need to remove a lot of staff, including praises.

I am dropping at chapter 1. Dialogues are just cheap superhero non stop "humor". It literally hurts to read. Please change your way of writing.

1. Some dialogues are outright stolen from other works and just don't work on this work. Example: Nezu and All Might suprise when they hear that mc's quirk name is All in One. He literally just told them about All for One and One for All, it just don't work here. At least think why are you stealing. 2. Other characters POV's are somehow incredibly dull and artificial. And considering that you put them very often that's a problem. 3. Fix your description. A lot of words with zero meaning.

I don't remember names, but one of them is student council leader and another is red-haired girl from kendo club.

Let's count his harem: Aika from Dxd, mother and two sisters, aunt, two girls from The Irregular at Magic School and Karren and C.C. from Code Geass. That's where I dropped. But there is Overlord ahead and Albedo on the book main picture... Yuri... well Aika lusts over girls, but there is no 18+ scenes between girls.

I'll add unnecessary info dump at the beginning to the bad staff, featuring mc's dead mother and father. Do they play any role after that? No. Why would i need that info from a long introduction? Just make him gacha-developer that died choking on a chicken bone.

Good: rational mc, interesting items from gacha. Bad: repetitiveness with gacha info, character progression (he is strong at the beginning and that's basically it), a bit boring mc (there are highlights, but between them...)

Too much repetitive info. If there is a girl in the chapter you will see AT LEAST ten or more times mentioning how handsome mc is. I got it. There is no need to say that again and again. 10% or so of ALL text is saying how beautiful he is.

That's just another chinese fic. Mc is aggressive dude who beats everyone. I get that that he does it for system rewards, but still - story is just him beating bland people who can't do anything. Can that even be considered a story?

Fic problems are quite obvious: 1. Cringe mc. Half of the things he do or say are just offensive to others, or said in a VERY wrong time. The only reason he is not half dead all the time is his storage skill, which makes him useful. 2. Constant use of words 'shocked' and 'stunned' over nothing. I get that it's a rewrite of manhua, but why you didn't change chat? 3. I forgot third problem)