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This fanfic is pure comedy, I like it. Being a cultivator is not easy, you had to learn so many cringe dialogues. I respect the mc for learning that
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Writing quality: It's decent. I am not a native English speaker, so I don't know if it's up to par for people with high standards. Story development: Well, as the author said, the plot isn't serious, so for those hoping to read serious stuff, it's not the place for you. Character Design: It could have been a lot better if he weren't overpowered from the start. Though I can expect some character development, right? Updating stability: 5 stars, no questions asked. World Background: 5 stars because I see potential, and adding KNB in Food Wars is just the pushy on top. This fanfiction is good for passing the time, and I know some people may not like it, but do your best, Breadtoast.
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This chapter is good and no Chinese vibes.
yeah, maybe you can work on your dailogues. I've read more than 200 mtl novels, and I'm certain that your way of writing dailogues quite matches mtl fics. And yeah, the major factor would be Alice, I suggest you to watch her clips and grasp the way she speaks.
Why do I feel like I am reading a Chinese novel. The first 5 chapters didn't gave me this vibe.
Chi..Chinese?
She felt like she was a fairy dancing in a dream. A strange cocoon materialized before her. With a sudden crack, it split open, revealing Tsuna wearing a prince attire with fairy like wings on his back. She offered her hand for a dance. Yet, in a swift and unexpected move, he cuts her wings and caged her for eternity.
well, nothing against you but if I continue further i will feel like i'm reading about a guy trying to be Sakuna. Anyway, best of luck, don't care about my opinion.