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How my god I think I mis spelled majorly

Thanks qfqoqr he chapter

I like this a lot, and I would’ve forgotten to give a review if the translator did not like my previous comment this is pretty good. I love how manipulative the MC is the only real problem is that it’s taking way too long to actually get the story on board but also at the same time I’m enjoying how long the story takes. Overall, the translation excellent. I don’t really see any problems.

This is entraining and I like his powers they are very creative but I do think he needs to find other characters to get energy from instead of Risa and her friend

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Kill the strong members of each clan, and the ones who have any kind of political power strip the two clans of their economic interest and make them dissolve the clans and for at least two generations have the anbu watch them

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If you’re wondering why I mentioned why it feels like an actual story not just a emotional dialogue between characters. It’s because that I noticed a lot of new Naruto stories don’t really like have any emotion in the characters and everything just seems fake in the relationships. So that’s why I mentioned it.

This is pretty good. It feels like an actual story and not just a emotionless dialogue between characters so good job. You’re doing pretty well with being a new writer I enjoy this story a lot and I’m glad I found it. The only thing I have to complain about is the big gap between sentences other than that good job keep up with the good work.