Lababi

The beginning of the story could turn out into something exciting and powerful. A system that could change just everything in the present. Each chapter has a moving plot twist and interesting direction. Good job, author.

A nice plot twist you got there 👍 looking forward to what had happened in the familiar place.

The storyline and its development is interesting and indeed, a page turner. I've seen no major grammar issues throughout the chapters. Great start! Looking forward to more. 👍👍👍

Great chapter. 👍