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Krishna_J_1851

Krishna_J_1851

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2022-02-11 UnidoGlobal
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  • Krishna_J_1851
    Krishna_J_18514mth
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    Story is great but be a little more detailed about romance even though mc is not a virgin author should show his encounter with beautiful female and there parting so u can get a feel for time passing for immortal and also meeting with femous personality.so what I mean to say is do not rush for main arc mc interacting with history as a immortal has its own charm

    Ch -3 Ideas.
    The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
    Filmes · Beans_on_a_tree
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  • Krishna_J_1851
    Krishna_J_18511yr
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    Please explain the Smit chapter more don't rush the story ex he spend time with his wife then time skip you want even explain what happened in whole period you just ship time

    Ch 4 Chapter 4 Baby Ghouls
    Reincarnated as the Demon King's Son
    Fantasia · Harlyboy
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