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This webnovel is very interesting... in a good way! It's fluid dialogue and description of what the characters are doing or saying really makes you feel like you're in the story, especially in certain scenes ahaha. It could use more descriptions to the places the characters are in, but you can fill that in with your imagination. What I like best about this webnovel is, of course, the beautiful dialogue. It flows smoothly between character interactions, and you can actually get a good feeling of what the characters are doing or their expressions when they speak to each other. Overall, I really like it, but I know the plot isn't something that everybody would enjoy, and that's okay!

Personally, I'm not the type to read stories like this, but this proves to be an exception. It brings you into a vivid world with real, human-like characters, especially the main character. Even if you aren't used to reading stories such as this, I'd recommend to at least read the first chapter before you skip it. The dialogue is fluid, and the premise of the story tends to be very emotional. Nonetheless, the plot is unique, and the desire of the characters are very human-like.

It's ok I'm crying too author

woah woah woah AY AY AY

Oh? She's homeless.

Interesting...

Change "Her eyes" to "She eyes" or even "She peeps"

You mean his lips pressed together?

She'll uhhh turn up eventually 😅

That's where character development comes in 😏 thank you though I will work on that!

Very strong and interesting start and good character monologue. Definitely lengthier chapters for longer reading. Has a lot of potential and you should keep going!