That's a good first chapter. Interestingly, this story has so much potential, but it could be a bit more descriptive in certain parts. Probably could use pathetic fallacy to create more of an attachment (just a suggestion), but I like it.
I liked the chapter. I especially like the way you implement your system. It is easy to differentiate the system from the overall narrative. It was a good read. Just what I needed after starting Sweet Home Season 2.
It really wasn't, but it's currently being edited. So look out for that. The ending might change a bit, and it will definitely be less confusing. I just updated chapters 1-11.
Thank you for the feedback. This will be noted for future novels. It would be greatly appreciated if you could expound on what made it the shittiest story.