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The_oneandonly3442dRespondeu a GyukoI understand what you’re saying, but I just said that Ariel existing is influencing everything around him including the characters, so they will be a bit different, I will not wholly focus on romance in this ff, there’s still a lot of important factors that has to be considered for their relationship to improve beyond just feelings, and Nephis isn’t in love with Ariel just yet, I never wrote it that way, she just likes him and respects him very much. But it still isn’t crossing the "I love you" line. As for Cassie falling in love was totally normal. At the beginning Cassie was just a normal girl living with a normal family, so when she went blind and everyone started treating her like a corpse. Of course she will grow attached to the only person who will notice and talk to her. And the mc is broken because I put the op tag on. Anyway I hope you got what I’m trying to say, but thx for your honesty, it was a little hurtful but hey it was very good criticism.
- The_oneandonly3442dRespondeu a Gyuko
I admit I made mistakes in the early chs, but after that I think the pace went well. Idk what you expect me to do about the characters. I wrote the way I saw them when I read the novel and this is how they came out. They’re all the same except they are influenced by Ariel in this ff, so if course they will be a bit different. As for tgg he r character development I tried to make it short and decent, I know how readers are, if I made it too long you, yourself would’ve complained that it’s too long. It was fast, abrupt and meaningful. Just how it’s supposed to be. And there’s nothing wrong with being overly cautious, it’s not idiotic, it’s called being smart. We haven’t seen the full world of shadow slave yet so who knows that there’s a being capable of fully erasing him?
- The_oneandonly34410dComentou
The voices!!
Rebecca took a deep breath, her hand trembling slightly as she picked up a glass of water. Taking a sip, she cleared her throat once again, - The_oneandonly34412dComentou
What?
'...I really do hold my grudges well.' - The_oneandonly34413dComentou
Holy
"There's only a weak person. No weak path." - The_oneandonly34413dRespondeu a LeylinTheFifth
It gets better don’t worry
"You have been asleep for a month. I wonder what kind shithole you ended up in for you to take that long. There was a kid that finished his just a few days ago. He too. Was from the outskirts. Quite a coincidence don't ya think?" - The_oneandonly34419dRespondeu a Vibe_CatCh 42 Sorry.
- The_oneandonly34420dRespondeu a DaoistktvfcFCh 31 Chapter 30
- The_oneandonly34421dRespondeu a Crimson_King
Exactly
[Class]:[Terror]. - The_oneandonly34422dRespondeu a VOID_321
Yes
It's been a while… Ariel thought with reminiscence. The image never once failed to amaze him and induce him with awe. The extraordinary wheel, the towering body of Mahoraga. Even the atmosphere was indescribable. As if thousands of hands were gently but strongly massaging his body to comfort him mentally and physically. - The_oneandonly34422dRespondeu a LeylinTheFifth
True, it was depressing.
An unholy titan was mentioned once and it fought a deity so it's similar to a god. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
Omg bro just read the ff without complicating things.
'I'm glad I could help her to. At least lessen the burden of her flaw. Even if it was for a little while.' I watched her devour her meal like a banshee with an amused smile. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
For a month. 2-3 weeks before sunny. So I made it when sunny came back, he also did the same.
we eventually ended up in front of a PTV. That most people couldn't even dream of getting one. Even if they have a license. It was a fully armored car that was built to easily fight nightmare creatures and advancing in the rough terrains. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
He gets used to it
Sunny looking visibly content with the cup of coffee in his hand. Stated with a bored tone "When is this damn induction ever going to start! We've been here for a long time. Even though I have a thick skull. I can't contain these condescending looks they're giving us." - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
No. It’s in the novel. It is mentioned in literally the same scene
"We don't know if the dream realm is one of the spell's illusions or not. But we do have an inclination that with the spell as the passageway between two realities. The nightmares we have to challenge. Are in a matter of fact. Happenings of the past. They're the history of the dream realm." - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
You don’t need to be an outskirt rat to devour food ya know. Normal people also get hungry?
'I'm glad I could help her to. At least lessen the burden of her flaw. Even if it was for a little while.' I watched her devour her meal like a banshee with an amused smile. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
He did.
At fifth place was my name along with a small description about my aspect and it's name. [Superior Physique]. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
I know. The past me made a huge mistake writing the first nightmare. I’ll assure you, you’ll like it once you finish the first nightmare. My writing gets better too. And I actually care about details. So yes I made a lot of mistakes but I’m trying to right it.
[You have slain an awakened terror!] - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a Sir_Squirrel
Because I put op in the tags
[Divergent core]: Demon. - The_oneandonly34423dRespondeu a BlazeSavage
I get your point. Thx for pointing it out.
A/N: yo! I hope you like it. As for Ariel being a team player, don't be mad about it. Believe me when I say they need everyone to be in top shape. It is the Same in the novel. Also give me your power stones. Let us get to first in rankings!!!