glad you liked it!

I wasn't trying to imply that he suddenly unlocked it, I meant to imply that his chakra was already pre unlocked beforehand because his parents decided to start training him early to be a shinobi.

thanks, but after a long couple of weeks I feel that if I were to just keep writing then I can just keep myself distracted from thinking about what happened. So I am still writing already updated the lost path and made a new fic called 'nah just me and my puppets'...it's been a good coping process for me so far.

thanks glad you enjoyed it!

the mother puppets clothes look similar to a female varient of the Jujutsu High School outfit but more shinobi like.

he's not aware of human puppetry he's only saying this to him right now to get Naruto scared.

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The battlefield is completely torn apart blood leaks down my face as the world is soon engulfed into the Infinite Tsukiyomi leaving Naruto, Sasuke, Kakashi-sensei, and I behind. Gritting my teeth together I stood up back up on both of my legs panting from exhaustion Madara looks down at me from above. "Still even when your outmatched you stand against me Takumi Fushiguro! you possess no bloodline of great renown, no ocular technique, nor any ninjutsu you're just a civilian boy playing pretend with his toy dolls!" I say nothing at first until my lips pull back and I find myself laughing "ahahahaha yeah well you know what fuck bloodlines! fuck dojutsu! fuck ninjutsu! AND FUCK YOU! I don't need any of that to keep up with my teammates or the likes of you." I shouted with fury. My hand swipes the seal on my heart "I may be a civilian shinobi but even someone normal can easily topple down the might of a Kami! With this forbidden seal unlocked I summon...the great divine puppet general MAHORAGA!!"

but anyway, just tell me what was wrong with the storytelling/dialogue so that I can improve on it.

I mean I wouldn't know if it's good or not I am just doing things by my own thoughts. Some may like it and others such as yourself may say they don't like it.

thanks, I appreciate your understanding and will attempt to get myself together when I can.

Hey thanks for that man I appreciate it very much.

thank you

thank you I appreciate that very much

I am not sure how to feel about my summary being compared to a Chinese novel...but to answer your question this is my own fanfiction.

no just Jeanne and possibly Jalter.

yes I am glad someone got that BBC reference I was making.

I am hoping to work on this one more eventually since a lot of people have been telling me how good of a start I've made.

thanks, don't mind if I do take that cookie

yeah for sure I'll go back in when I've got some time and edit to the proper terms and ranking.