KjellTheViking
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Just a bit of constructive criticism, but you gotta work on expressing your ideas about the story. You keep repeating the same thing over and over again, but with different words. I don't need to read 3 times about how Destiny Day is super important for everyone cause it determines their future. I got that the first time. It gets frustrating for the reader when in every chapter you repeat the same information in 3 different ways. 1, it makes it seem like you're trying to use filler to make the story more robust. 2, it can also make it seem like you're treating the readers like we're idiots.
Yea he wasn't but he was known cause of his sister. He also made himself look weak on purpose in every time-line.
I'm ok with the Vampire Queen. Feels bad to watch her go through character progression and be a good woman to him and not get rewarded.