It’s be a mix of ointments, pills, potions, and plant-based bandages!

True! The twins get violent whenever they’re in a battle, especially if it’s against each other

Hmm let’s see dun dun dunnn

Hehe glad you liked it

Yeah!!

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I know!! HAHAHA the gore and everything *chef’s kiss* lol jk

True!! In my story, I’m still trying to incorporate some real life events though of course the context will be tweaked to fit the novel’s narrative and add more sensitivity to how I write it

Good points! More information about this will be placed in future chapters. As of now, it’s mostly foreshadowing hehe

Thank you!! Will try to keep updating more chapters. Just tending to a personal matter at the moment 😅

Good job in writing the character design and their respective backgrounds to act as a foundation of the plot. Looking forward to how the characters will grow and interact with each other more! Keep doing your best!!

Good writing technique. Not so sure about the R-18 scenes since I’m not a fan of it. But if you are interested in harem and the like, then this book is for you!

Really love everything about this! First chapter in and I’m already blown away—the descriptions, character thoughts, and world building. It’s as if I was also present in that world. Truly a magnificent way of writing. Keep it up and continue to do your best!

Hello! Just read a few chapters of your novel. Here are my comments so far: 1. I like how you wrote the story. It was easily understandable and not too hard to digest. I could easily imagine the setting that the MC was in. There wasn’t much word vomit so the info placed were all useful. 2. Loved the concepts presented in the story. The Laitions and Arionss were new to me so I liked that it was mentioned. You can explain their characteristics too, along with the characters the MC interacted with, to make it more interesting. 3. Chapter upload is stable which is good. Keep up the good work! 4. There was an abrupt change in the MC’s emotions. Make it seem like the MC was more in a frantic or in denial state before he accepts what happened to him and actually strives to do better. 5. The way the system was described was a bit overwhelming or confusing for me. Maybe the format could still be improved and some aspects could be further explained. 6. There also some grammatical errors and the syntax could still be improved (try using Grammarly. That helped me a lot). But this doesn’t take away from the main content. The story could still be understood and enjoyed properly. 7. Work on the dialogues more. It would be nice if you also placed who spoke. Ex: “Hello leader!” Ling Yu happily said as she waved her hands in my direction. Hope this helped you with your novel! Continue to write more and do your best!

I just made a Discord server for my work. I’ll be sending updates there about Panolethria. You can also interact and promote your own work in some of the channels there. If you’re interested to join, here’s the link: https://discord.gg/e2FvZA4jwc Everyone is welcome there!

I just made a Discord server for my work. I’ll be sending updates there about Panolethria. You can also interact and promote your own work in some of the channels there. If you’re interested to join, here’s the link: https://discord.gg/e2FvZA4jwc Everyone is welcome there!

Sure! I will read your story in my spare time and try to give comments!

OMGG!! Thank you so much for reading the story! I will continue making more quality chapters for you guys!

AAAA THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS! I really appreciate it! Will take everything into consideration and make the new world more elaborate <3