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ShadowAmeratsu

ShadowAmeratsu

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I enjoy writing things for others to enjoy :)

2020-11-12 UnidoGlobal
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23.7h

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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    The novel has an impressive plot, with huge room to have the characters roam, but the pilot chapter seemed to lack emotion. It had great detail and amazing descriptions, but when it came to providing emotions or human body language, it didn't seem the best. I hope that it improves as it goes along, but I'm optimistic of its future :)

    The Tellus Mage
    Fantasia · Junethephatcat
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Comentou

    He's no longer a stickman!

    Este livro foi excluído.
  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a DaoistHolySwitch

    Thank for the review, but for most people, they found it pretty easy to read. It may just be personal preference or something similar that's preventing you from getting into the flow, and that's completely natural. I hope you have a good 2023 :)

    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a TheWanderingBard

    Thank you so much for this awesome review!

    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    Quite impressive literature skills from the author, which honestly astonished me when they told me that they had only started writing since the New Year. Genuinely interested in how the story progresses with it's incredible use of metaphors and hidden symbolism.

    Este livro foi excluído.
  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    This is quite a good novel with a great plot that can be expanded upon further once more time is put into it! I would suggest getting an editor to look over your work and correct a few spelling mistakes, just to make it so anyone can sit down and read this without trying to decipher what's being said :)

    Super Thief
    Fantasia · Justin_Gabventure
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a Naescent

    Thank you very much! I really hope you keep enjoying the novel as it progresses!

    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Comentou

    Popping* might wanna correct this one in particular

    Este número foi suprimido.
    Super Thief
    Fantasia · Justin_Gabventure
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a Junethephatcat

    I can absolutely do that! Thank you very much for showing me what can be improved, as I'd love to make this the best novel I've ever written :)

    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a Justin_Gabventure

    Thank you very much :)

    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    The novel has an impressive plot, with huge room to have the characters roam, but the pilot chapter seemed to lack emotion. It had great detail and amazing descriptions, but when it came to providing emotions or human body language, it didn't seem the best. I hope that it improves as it goes along, but I'm optimistic of its future :)

    The Tellus Mage(OLD VERSION OLD VERSION OLD VERSION OLD VERSION)
    Fantasia · Junethephatcat
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a ShadowAmeratsu

    No problemo

    Awakening the Ancient System
    Oriental · DaoistHolySwitch
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    The writing quality could use a bit of work, but it has a great concept behind it. With a bit of editing, it could get 5 stars, easily. It has good characters and a nice plot, so I'm hoping to see more of this :)

    Awakening the Ancient System
    Oriental · DaoistHolySwitch
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Postado

    This book has quite a good premise, with impressive execution of the story. The author paces it well enough so that it doesn't drag on, but nothing feels too rushed. If you're interested in fantasy/system novels, I would highly recommend giving this one a shot :)

    Este livro foi excluído.
  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a ZerGStaLiMNorR

    Thank you! I really pride myself in the sheer advancements made between this novel and Skelengel. It's much more balanced with a more fleshed out plot :)

    Ch 4 The Library
    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a ZerGStaLiMNorR

    I mean, I've seen people reference the left side as the left hand, so I personally believe it fits lol

    A screen popped up on the left hand of Archie's vision. It was a pastel blue colour with black text that made it easy to read.
    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a ZerGStaLiMNorR

    They will.

    "Well, as you can probably tell, I am no ordinary skeleton. I have enough MP to destroy the entire first floor of the dungeon. Possibly. My MP stat says 'Boundless'."
    Skelengel; Tales Of The Boundless One [Not Updating]
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a ZerGStaLiMNorR

    That is true, it's quite a bad thing to do. He's revealing information about himself. You'll see where revealing this information gets him later. One word of advice though. If you want to read a genuinely good story, read The System Of Silence. I'm writing it as of right now and it's turning out so much better than this novel.

    "Well, as you can probably tell, I am no ordinary skeleton. I have enough MP to destroy the entire first floor of the dungeon. Possibly. My MP stat says 'Boundless'."
    Skelengel; Tales Of The Boundless One [Not Updating]
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a bear_Freak_2422

    I don't think I ever specified, but later on it's revealed that he's a second-year student in his school, which means that he's 14 years old :)

    Archie woke up in his bed, gasping for air. Sunlight was breaching his curtains, alerting him that it was morning. He quickly threw off his bedsheets to look at his destroyed leg, but to his surprise, his leg was fine. Archie looked at his side, noticing that he wasn't bleeding anymore. Hell, it appeared to have never started bleeding in the first place. 'System, tell me everything you know about Night Terrors.' Archie commanded the system in his mind. A pale blue text box appeared in the centre of his vision.
    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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  • ShadowAmeratsu
    ShadowAmeratsu1yr
    Respondeu a Black47

    More is coming, don't worry :)

    Ch 15 Shadows In The Mirror
    The System Of Silence - Silence Is My Only Salvation
    Fantasia · ShadowAmeratsu
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