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Well from my perspective, about the story it depends on what you want to see. At the end of all, if you don't like it, you will stop writing. Second point, following the series gives you an idea of what you can write. You could follow the line of the series, but adding things that could happen. things in the town that were not seen in the series or school plots, etc. To fill gaps and give more development to the characters. The mc did feel weak, for Harry Potter fans, the first years knocked down a Troll bigger than a Hyde. I felt that you made the Hyde seem too strong, since the main enemy died in a much weaker way than the magic.
From naruto's personality i would think he would like to train hermione like he did hinata he already has daphne but i doubt hermione isn't as talented she is more likely to be the easiest to manipulate wasting malleable talent no Sounds like something Asura would do, same for Luna maybe.
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Author I do not want to sound rude, but it is annoying for the reader so many chapters demanding votes. The votes are the result of the readers believing that your story is good, not the other way around, at least personally, every time I see chapters asking for support, they take away the desire to give it. I'm not saying that asking for support once or twice is wrong, but usually it's when the story wins it, this story doesn't even have 30 chapters and of those at least 10 are not stories but messages. The votes are won with good plots and consistency in the chapters, look at the tops and most are long stories with few chapters that have nothing to do with the story. The best thing you can do is just continue with the story, writing good chapters instead of demanding votes, in the end you will only make people lose interest in you as an author and as much as the story is good, people will prefer not to read it if they bother
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Hmm I think the mistake was not presenting the story you wanted well, if you want a villainous mc and you say so, people will accept the actions that we like, because we understand that the mc will be a villain who goes against morals. But if what you want is just someone smart, the best thing would be to put intelligent situations that justify that he always gets what he wants and in the same way give him more plots thanks to his intelligent actions. Example, you want freya to be against him, because the mc knows his plans, make him block or avoid them, frustrating freya and having a fight in the shadows, creating dark and intelligent fight plots between them. You want a way for her to have a chance with hestia, justify the goddess losing her love for bell, for her to understand through scenarios that bell didn't love her romantically. Manipulate people in a practical way, justifying actions so that most of your audience accepts them. Or explain your story from the beginning, remember that it is yours, the readers do not matter because if you only rely on them, you will never please them. Focus on the type of story you want because if not you will lose your interest and leave it. In turn, don't feel bad if you start losing a lot of readers because that will be your story. But in the end it's your story
why kill bell? Just to have a chance with Hestia? If only for that reason there are many other ways to develop something with her, as a fan you don't want to see a dead bell, I might think that she would give more help to the mc or a good development to have more power, a smart guy talking about mc would see it more as a very easy tool to manipulate for his purposes, but in the end it is his author story and his decisions are respected, it's just that I would like him to explain them because I don't understand them, if possible thanks