WebnovelCreator101
We are the WebnovelCreators101™. We collaborate in planning, making and publishing stories purely for fun. Our mission is to create stories that will leave a mark on any webnovel readers, so enjoy! ><
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Ah... Less with the crude swearing please. Gives off the vibe of an immature novel, kinda...?
Pfft... Sorry, but the discrepancy is just hilarious...
. . . uhh, really? Wow. Adds to the fact that they're awesome then^^
Hey! Nice way with the sarcasm, not going too overboard, but less with it, please^^ and I know 'pabo' is Korean for that. Just that it seems more of an anime reference material if I use 'baka'. You know, those cute 'tsunderes'. No one can resist them. And they're so annoying! Well, thanks for the reminder though, regardless of any other things. It was nice to know people can still scold (or inform) others of their mistakes. Hope you'll keep on doing it^^
well I can't lie here dude, so yeah I skipped the POV. somehow I get bored a little too fast for a webnovel reader. no hard feelings^^
Dokja is out of place here^^ though it feels nice to know someone brought him up again after his downfall
the high fairy
Come on, you can't have forgotten. It's the high fairy acquainted with flameau from before, when Hugo helped her to find the glowing flower in the underground caverns ^^
Lol, really good one ^^ I practically laughed through my nose at this. Then I marvel at how you seem to structure paragraphs that never becomes dull to read. Awesome 'Spilt Milk'.
Just a little error in which it needs to be corrected - and which I cannot ignore, unfortunately, because it hinders with my flowing imagination of the story. It kind of pulls me away from the flow of the story and its really unpleasant ^^ so here is what I have come up with: change 'scraped' into present tense 'scrapes'. Simple. Sorry and thank you.
I really feel for this part ^^ and I'm riveted
I like it. It's good for a first story. You might want to fix your tenses a bit, but the flow of the story is impressive. Your hard work has payed out, so don't worry, I can see it clearly throughout the first chapter. And the way you leave out details is no problem at all, it's just the way authors do it ^^
I'll read yours too, no doubt ^^