Marx_Cipriano
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Good enough, good characters I like the story But there are some problems Too many unnecessary bits and too unnecessarily slow Like, it's satisfying to see crafting in detail, but it's repetitive and boring. It repeat in a cycle until there's no more joy in reading him craft things You should know when to write detail and when to NOT write in details Sometimes it's better to skip things and not focus on them You should know what parts of the story are not needed
(What I'm writing is my personal perspective over the progress of the story) Story is good What I don't like is the sudden shift of the mc's character into a lustful character That part of him is not well written and doesn't fit much into the story, it is a bit forced and unnecessary I used to like him, but man it didn't do him justice It's unbearable sometimes We don't need sex scenes, we need actual story and actions You're going far from the focus you set for yourself Frankly i find him unfaithful to his partners and the harem is turning from good to unbearably terrible
I kinda of hmmm find Bulma really annoying, like that one relative that only wants to suck your money But I also find it as a good demonstration of the skill of the author. You know the author is great if they can write a reasonable hateful character Anyways I'm not a hater so please don't hate me Dang, I finally managed to catch up after reading a lot of chapters
yeah They're like really annoying But it's only a part that shows the author's great skill at writing.