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Put twice in a genjutsu, making twice fight on the hero’s side by making clones of Yuta or other characters to fight the villains
Now all the villains can be like
Always love the attention to detail in speach patterns, it’s truly what makes this fic shine. It’s been a while since I played the game so I can’t tell if “monacopter” is a thing futaba actually said, but if it’s not then that is so in character I love it!
I’m too good, I should’ve put a spoiler 😎
😩 (domain expansion, infinite backshots)
But don’t let my criticisms get to you, this story is so good that the most I can do is nit pick
A little heavy on the social, but I guess that’s mostly what we’re here for. I wish there was a few more casual mementos runs, and palace infiltrations run a little bit long, it would be great if they were like 15% shorter. The romance is great, fantastic, keep doing what you are doing. The mystery is intriguing, but you are a bit obvious about a lot of things, so I would say either give up on the mystery and just reveal things, or stop having characters drop so many hints. The Elizabeth chapter in particular revealed a bit too much for how early it is.
Ahem… she’s 14
Maybe regular people can feel that “something” is there, since personas are much more powerful and noticeable than Morgana speaking and Ren’s eyes. But it could be like hollows in bleach, invisible, but *felt*
Tartuffe is Nyx confirmed?
I think you mean ‘back from killing Kaneshiro’
Taro Tanaka?
I have read further over the past few days, and can definitely see an improvement in the areas I complained about. It’s nice to see more team building aspects which were rather lacking in game, and I also really like how you introduced Madarame. Proactively introducing palace owners is much more engaging than just stumbling upon them like in the game. Also, introducing Futaba early was really cool, and I hope the same will be done for Kasumi! 😁👍
The matter is transmuted into the persona. As for why they wanna transmute money specifically? Well, the will to live leaving your eyes is a necessary ingredient