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DraconicEmperor1yrComentou"she will meet" to "she met"
June was confident in her looks. With black hair, fair skin and a sharp face with green eyes, she was called pretty by most people she will meet and she has been honing her acting skills since her teenage years.- DraconicEmperor1yrComentou
gourd would probably be a more context-appropriate container
When the process finished Nie Li opened his eyes. He felt great if a bit thirsty. He took out some bottles of water to drink and looked around. Girls were looking at him astonished. - DraconicEmperor1yrComentou
There's too many "year"s
Este número foi suprimido. - DraconicEmperor1yrComentou
"He lay on the bed..." => "He laid on the bed..."
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"What he should do about her?" => "What should he do about her?"
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I don't get why you'd call it "Flexibility" then. Just call it "Gymnastics" if you want the skill to give the MC both flexibility and balance.
For example, his flexibility skill was way better than he had imagined. Not like it makes him a natural gymnast, it also helped him maintain his balance at all times. - DraconicEmperor2yrComentou
I don't think you know what "to that extent". You should use "consequently" instead.
Hector laid back, "Honestly, I'm bored, son. Remember when I told you about space? I will go there, maybe find a way to bring advanced tech here and make America stronger, to that extent the world. Until I return, I want you to keep working on making sure the nations do not get too corrupt. I know without me it's inevitable, but you need to keep Senators and Representatives in your pocket for as long as you can." - DraconicEmperor2yrComentou
Couple means a single set of 2 people, "couples" imply 2 or more sets of 2 people so at least 4 people. Couple is the correct word to use. "The media loves talking about how the Vice President and Marilyn Monroe are the best couples of this era." Should instead be "The media loves talking about how the VP and Marilyn Monroe are this era's best couple."
Kennedy was right now 60, it was still a pretty young age. "Haha, come here, boy. Did you take a wrong turn or something? I thought you'd never leave your wife's side. The media loves talking about how the Vice President and Marilyn Monroe are the best couples of this era." - DraconicEmperor2yrComentou
Maybe just remove the "FOR" in the "FOR HOW LONG WILL YOU RUN, BOY?" if you're still editing this story.
"FOR HOW LONG WILL YOU RUN, BOY?" Bucky laughingly shouted towards him. - DraconicEmperor2yrComentou
Isn't there already a Ghost Rider in the MCU tho?
Marvel Universe 69***, (A/N: MCU but with Mutants, Ghost Rider and other beings.] - DraconicEmperor3yrComentou
"...can take of you..." to "...can take care of you" Just proofreading and nothing malicious. Love your work. :)
"Each of you should make good use of this time to learn everything you need to know and have the minimum required strength to be able to survive the journey that will come after we leave the capital! Remember, while you might think I am strong and can take of you, it should be me that should rely on you as your employer. Prove to me that I did not make a mistake by taking you out of that black-hearted merchant's grasp!"