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Why not A Fae's Gambit as a name, just a suggestion though, I'm sure you'll figure it out :)
Thanks for the chapter, currently my fav fanfiction. Just an idea, one you've probably already thought off, but have you thought about using conditions/binding contracts, like Neville's Heavenly Restriction. For example, create a binding contract that allows the MC to use his spirits innate powers like has was born with them, but in return it kills the spirit or something similar.
Yeah in the original light novel it used to be X2, X4, X8, etc, but then they changed it to an additive boost, like if you had a power level of 10 then used a boost it would be 20, then if you used it again it would be 30. So frankly just go off what you thinks make a better story since the cannon is an incoherent mess, especially later on in the series.
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Hi, loving your work. Just an idea, since your already doing great. Why not make it a bit of both since Great Red is often related to dreams why not make it so he was created from the essence of dreams gathering in the dimensional gap while Ophis was born from the potential infinity of the dimensional gap. This means they would both be born from the Gap, but also be semi guardians, this would also explain why Ophis wants Great Red gone since he wasn't technically born from the Dimensional Gap itself, therefore making him an outsider in Ophis's mind. It's just an idea and I'm sure whatever you make it'll be great.
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Thanks for the chapter, so far it looking amazing. If you need any inspiration for things like cursed spirits that isn't from JJK have a look at the Webcomic The Gamer since it had a few things very similar, along with things to abuse and benefit said events. Also, just an idea I think you could give the MC Parseltongue, but not as a technique but as a Gift, like how The Six Eyes aren't a technique just a powerful physical mutation, and maybe make it a little more useful instead of just talking to snakes, like the ability to command any snake real or spiritual or the power to amplify any spell or technique is used in. Anyways these are just ideas I'm sure you've got something in mind and I can't wait to read more :)
It’s ok, but clearly the story is pandering to the mc to make him feel special and unique, and since every one underestimates the mc due the the limitations on the beast master class, which I think is a really dumb thing to do, he shocks everyone and proves his superiority. However, while the mc is kinda basic he seams really chill to an extent and I personally like that to a degree. Give the first 10 or 15 chapters a read and you’ll quickly discover what I’m talking about and if you’re interested in this type of story.
Hi, loving your work. Here's to hoping that Brom gets his face kicked in and the MC finally makes his escape. I’m just hoping that you’ll go through with the idea the MC actually leaves and finds his own way, but hey this is your story and you’ve been great, please keep up the great work.
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I don't think Gojo should join the league it goes against his character since he's no 100% hero that believes in the best of humanity, I mean he's willing to kill people so I don't think it would work out. Also, instead of making him infinite why not amp up his already existing powers. So Blue could become as powerful as a real black hole, Red could become as powerful as a real white hole, and Purple can erase anything that it touches. Plus, the barrier he can create is just conceptually stronger so it actually bring a concept of infinity into reality so there reality is a limitless amount of distance between him and the target. You could also make it so the previous limitations he may have had no longer exist so he gradually becomes stronger over time, instead of him becoming god instantly, like he could train to develop his reverse cursed technique to the point where he can heal from bisection, the thing that killed him the the other world, or other serious wounds.
Question are your crossedge? because this is his story, and if anyone is interested go to https://www.fanfiction.net/u/13443249/crossedge?__cf_chl_tk=6SvqGOHK6weJM.kYoaoIGL6moP25Y9ZvJuEJIqem8_I-1694680212-0-gaNycGzNHTs to find the full story.
Hi love your work. I know I’m a bit late but have you thought about making Zeus mortal until he learns empathy for his punishment. Please, keep up the great work :)
Here's some honest advice, don't create so many new chapters for updates and especially not for the results. It annoys people and it makes it look like you've got more chapters then you've got, so when they check they're bombarded with updates and that gets really annoying, even more so when there's so many of them. You could delete your old ones which does make it better, or alternatively use the note section at the end of a chapter. Sorry if I come across as an a*&hole but this is an honest review and some constructive criticism.
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I think you should choose option 2 and occasionally use the other options.