AtticusChea

What I dislike most about your story is that every MC of your are too trusting, too goody two shoes. Take this story for example….it start of so good but turn to terrible after the MC meet the X-Men and the Avenger. Now I don’t mean that I want you to write an anti hero story but make the MC have more depth, more personality instead of just being a “good guy”

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This is a plot issue…yes Iron Island have slave but people tend to ignore them because of the culture of the Iron Island. However Tarth is different, and nothing can cover up the MC bought slaves…you think people on the Island wouldn’t snitch on you just because you make their life better? But the religion of the Seven doesn’t allow slaves so some of the religious zealots WILL snitch. And the MC is not strong enough to fight the might of the 6 kingdoms. This is such a big plot issue that ruin the story. It’s might be better if you explain that you bought slave but you free them and paid them for their work instead of saying that nobody gonna know because this is an island.

It’s not bad but there is a big plot issue with the slaves…Westeros doesn’t accept anything that have to do with slaves. No selling and no buying slaves. So the fact that somehow the MC “bought” slaves doesn’t make sense.

But this is a plot hole….because the MC is just an enhanced human…his Xgene is not activated. Professor X can tell the difference between human enhanced and Mutant, same with Beast if he have the MC DNA.

Same, I basically guess that this will happen since the MC practice chakra at 5…This IS Konoha…Danzo and Sarutobi have eyes everywhere. It’s like the MC never watch “Naruto” Sorry Author, I like your other novels but I’m dropping this one. I’m not saying it is bad, it’s just not for me.

Plz don’t let the MC work with SHIELD.

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No…

4 is not a harem? I thought it's gonna be just 2 lovers, but 4 is a harem. Sometimes stories that are good was ruined by harem, because the author doesn't know what to write anything interesting with all those lovers. At some points it becomes a "to catch em all"