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bye. the POV is trash. How do you even call this POV? 3rd person from 1st persons perspective? Like it's so trash it's sad.
so far. ch1 is absolute trash.
Beautiful lady? She is a kid, 6ish years old? the word is cute, and the other word is kid/girl. not beautiful or lady. Almost dropping and it's barely half a chapter in.
She has plans for him
"I've made clear that he knew of some of the shady shit he had done previously. " wherE? :D In other comments? So i have to check all the comments in all the previous chapters to know your context??? Ur a clown.
why tf did MC let danzo escape... retardation
aka author doesnt want MC to become stronger just yet.
yeah... because no1 would send some1 who has killed jonins to a chunin exam. talk about bs.
so mc is waiting for rin to die? kinda low. I would rather get rid of obito early and no1 gets kamui.
... why not just have him unseal kagura, show her the sexy jutsu, beat her up, and manage to get all her power on first try too? This is too lame, even for wish fulfillment fanfic.