The Unbidden World

So far I am quite enjoying the story other than a few grammatical errors and spelling mistakes; for example, in chapter 1 you used the word transliterated, I think maybe you meant transformed? In chapter three, "However, her attention was capued by the ringing of the bell on the door as they walked in, and her expression quickly became as negative as that of her patrons." It should have been "captured" instead of "capued" Although, there are a few grammatical errors (Punctuation) and spelling mistakes, the story from sentence to sentence/paragraph to pargraph flows well.

A genuinely interesting story. Though I only read two chapters, the characters and plot are interesting and the writing style is good. There is an occasional minor spelling error but that's rare. I'm curious about the future chapters and it mixes comedy really well.