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HotC0C09mthCommentedCh 998 The Fall of Falcon Scott (16)- HotC0C01yrReplied to Lamar
Dude relax, its a webnovel not some essay you are assugned to grade. people on this app just cant enjoy a story, Always the beed to nitpick 🙄
The moment that he opened his eyes, a faint purple glow flashed through them! - HotC0C02yrReplied to Good_Hot_Chocolate
I agree with Hot_Coco and not because thats my league name. throwing around things like “she did this cause shes a woman” Or “shes weak cause of her woman dna” just feels off when comparing it to the rest of the novel which I really like.
She had made another good move with the instincts of a woman. - HotC0C03yrReplied to Good_Hot_Chocolate
Yes, of course.
The mayor watched them leave from the window, then he closed the window, picked up the clothes, and went into the bedroom to try them on. - HotC0C03yrReplied to Good_Hot_Chocolate
Your name on here is my name for league lol
The mayor watched them leave from the window, then he closed the window, picked up the clothes, and went into the bedroom to try them on. - HotC0C03yrPosted
I gave a 3 for writing quality because its decent. Some things need to be reread twice but nothing horrible. 4 for Stability of Updates honestly just because I haven't read it in a while and had a stockpile going. 1 for Story development because of overuse of switching viewpoints that drag the story on. Its like Im watching an Indian drama where something happens and I need to see the viewpoints and reactions of every single character there. Something happens to the mc and we get this flashback and then another flashback for the other character and if another character happens to be in both in the flashback and in the scene then they also get a flashback even though its the same material. It gets really irritating reading this when One second i'm reading what the mc is doing and abruptly it changes viewpoints. This I wouldn't normally have a problem with but its done sooooo many times. Then you get a change in viewpoint to something that has already happened to the mc but earlier in the story from a side characters point of view. lots of information is being reiterated and Im paying to read content that i've already read. 4 for character design because I do like the characters that are in this story and even though i did say that the problems in the story development part makes it hard for me to continue reading it, it does add to the characters and gives them more life than what i've read in other stories. If the author could stop the repetition, stop the over use of flashbacks and switching viewpoints and progress the story clearer than I'd really enjoy it a lot more. 4 for world background. I think the author did well in showing the world the characters are in as they go from one area to another. Overall I would say read it, its good and the characters aren't 1 dimensional from what I read so far. I will probably continue reading it when I don't have anything else to read only for the reasons I put in the story development part so far.
- HotC0C03yrCommented
I like this book. One big thing that I have a problem with though is that the author describes one thing over and over and over and over and over again. i get adding context or emotions or whatever but the author goes overboard and repeats many thing in a different way. If i kept going on to describe what im talking about you would feel like this whole paragraph i wrote could have been summarized in a sentence or two about how things get repeated way to many times but then you would think yeah no duh but right when you think im done i just restart about how things gey so repetitive. normally wouldnt be a problem but we are paying those stoney stones ya know. feels like it jacks up the price but thats just me.
Ch 181 A Feeling as Though Life Is at the Pinnacle - HotC0C03yrReplied to HotC0C0Ch 1266 Light