Daoist_Leonidian

He had 10 min to counter without being red tagged. In most games attacking a red tagged player will not make you red tagged since you are doing “justice”. Red tag probably lasts an hour or more. Depends on the game but it’s a warning system to other players not just the first you went after. I’m sure the previous chapter said how long but who really reads these word for word right? Necro post for the win!

annnd done... the grammar is very rough. I apologize for all the corrections but at 1am when i usually sleep at 10pm it seemed like a good idea. You have a decent starting premise so just roll with the hits and move on. Good luck!

is -> was

theres... there's stuff here... "he shouted at him as he TOOK out his dagger and desperately tried to attack Elton, even as his strength was rapidly decreasing. He managed to grab Elton but, just as he was going to stab him, Elton managed to avoid the attack and take his dagger to stab him instead. " This kind of sentence is always rough. It's why most translators will just constantly put the MC's name everywhere in the sentence.

was --> is; in this flashback he is being affected by the poison in the "present"

would -> would have: fall into -> fall to

Spitting out blood with each of his roars, he surprised himself as he managed to stand up, as he felt his strength decreasing for some unknown reason.

He grabbed a hold of his chest, and felt his breathing become heavy, as he stumbled...

another case of third person talking, so past tense here. "... and he didn't have any idea..."

He shook his head, to clear his mind, as he walked around. However, he felt like he was going in circles, there was no end to the pitch-black place. Not sure if i got this one 100% correct but meh.