Lesley_Vaden

You aren't letting her be a fully developed character. Shes just a tag-a-long...this is a missed opportunity for a more fulfilling story.

Why do the naming conventions not match the story? The worst thing about this story is the names.

She doesn't have the same last name?

Where are all the wizards? Knights and wizards aren't the same thing.

Exuding (from the verb exude) means to display an emotion, quality, or trait so strongly that it seems to radiate from you

So many names for the same guy...cut it out.