Aquacious_6824

it's grammatically incorrect u should have put luxury in this sentence than luxurious

there are no grammatical mistakes in the story and conversations do not feel forced. the way the author narrates the story is intriguing and makes the overall plot interesting and promising. however there are few aspects which genuinely require some more focus and understanding of the author regarding the work. here are few elements which according to me should be fixed up or atleast taken into consideration while narrating forward this story 1. lack of new characters_ one of the most popular aspects of zombie related or survival fantasy is their frequent killing of side and main characters. neha and min have survived our protag for more than three encounters. there should've been some action or clash between them. it just annoys the readers and is honestly quite frustrating to read. if you just add new characters or challenges for mc then it feels more survival themed. 2.your writing style is perfect but it is not that elaborate so that scenes can be imagined in the mind as if one is watching a movie. sometimes it just doesn't make sense ( for eg when our protag during his first evolution tried to create a trigger for his claws using tendons. him looking like human but which slenderman physique and tentacles. the mecha arm from system with spikes but it making him look human.) 3. our protag has unnecessary ruthlessness and bias even towards his own father and he lacks ambition or something that relates to humans. I get it that you want the character style to be less humane for the sake of the story but what's the point if people start relating to min and neha than our mc. 4. the major backbone of your story is mystery and action so when you did time skip it felt as if the entire story is back to square one. you need to reveal some clues and points to make it more interesting for eg I loved it when iIgot to know that neha was a regressor but her entire perspective felt rushed and drew no conclusion on entirely of storyline like how did she regress and why? her pov should've been in some chapter including min's as it makes the character more interesting and likable. anyways I wouldve wrote more but my battery is dying and i seriously want to thank the author as for the first time in a while I have liked a novel and is intrigued by it. good luck .and keep working hard . I hope you manage to breathe the story you have been imagining into life and keep us entertained

hey there!! you definitely gave a lot of perspective and social stuff there. since your review was to provoke thoughts and allow you to study why someone likes or does not like a particular work or art. i will tell you my experience so far and why I dropped this novel, with few instances from my personal life: 1. the premise was good, world building is solid and hasn't developed that far yet so i can't say something about it. I have read many generic academy-professor novels, so it is like i can actually pinpoint what is going to happen in the story. i have also stated that it is quite simillar to A Villain's Will to survive, however the power trope and resurrection after death was a new concept for me and it got me hooked, however when mc's parents including siblings and subordinates failed to recognize him as 'imposter' it felt like a plot hole to me and believe me the readers who have a little logical reasoning hate plot holes. ( many will say that he was away for three years for millitary service so they didn't recognize him. however even if i am away for 5 years, my family will recognize my odd behaviour in 5 minutes ). currently, i am a student and i have asian parents so yeah i am very close to my family despite my introverted and anti social nature. i excel academically and read novels for fun. in asian family you have to perform well in academics, so in order to keep my mind cool and enjoy myself, it is a better escape from reality, i am not some delusional person who enjoys projecting myself as villain or hero i read for fun as it is one of my hobbies. 2. later in the story, mc takes a lecture and one of the friends of female mc tells him to come to clubroom as she wants to thank him. mc being head of department readily accepts and it feels unrealistic. it is like a higher authority person is summoning someone for something. believe me realism should be a part of story even if it's genre is fantasy. like i will never ask my middle aged department head to come to my club and i want to thank him for something. 3. mc's original weapon is gun and he kills some voodoo puppet in the first arc. many readers will not relate to me for this part but i actually don't like mcs with guns or other unethical weapons, it feels forced in fight scenes when they defeat an archer, sword user or spear user with guns.in the first arc he was barely able to stop and immobilize the puppet and it was finished by someone else but people keep praising him for it. His weapon is handgun but he somehow kills her using sword i mean glass sword but it is brushed off in next chapter and author doe not provide context for it. 4. author tries very hard to give mc cold and calculating person aura or image but he/she makes him do such things naturally a cold hearted person would not do it. I mean it is already crazier enough for all girls to be in love with mc without any given context but you create a contradictory mc with cold traits and pushover personality, it just adds fuel to the fire. 5. this novel also has lack of male characters with same standing or higher standing than our mc. we are only introduced to a single character who is strongest knight but it seems he will be less involved in main story. author will only unleash him when mc will not be able to respond to a higher level of threat or to give him some competition for harem. I am not a harem hater or single fml guy i am pretty neutral in this context i just want to read something interesting by not getting out of my comfort zone. i have average height and average build ( not fat also not too much thin, may be i am thin). i only had few friends since my school and i prefer it that way as it is peaceful and good. ( also we need to do something about stereotypes that all guys who like anime/manga/manhwa or novels are fat bast**ds living in basement with coke and chicken wings). hope this review helps you in your study and sorry to author for leaving you alone in this journey

I was expecting a full blown hurl of abuses in my way when i wrote that review and i was prepared for it as i am as much honest to myself as much i am towards any work on this platform. i never expected such humility from you ( it's a rare thing in this bs world where any fata** could abuse anyone while being synonymous). however since it is not my cup of tea, i will leave you alone on this adventurous journey. however i will always check out your novels in future through this platform( please do fix that corny dialogues part and do not make relationship forced, take as much time you want to develop it. it ruins the taste of any masterpiece. ) glad to hear you enjoyed that review. thanks

my review regarding this work is quite mixed. there are a few things which ticked me off very much. !. author integrating anime like cliches very much and short dialogues with no natural flow between characters feels forced. !!. author also tried to force relationship between characters and it feels rushed.( e.g princess's case and other girl considering him a stalker). !!!. author tried to create mysterious and off the charts violent characters at expense of shaming the mc( e.g for showing unfiltered and abusive side of alice, he made mc bump into her and was cursed by her. our mc apologized during first time but viewers criticized him so during second time he created another anime-like cliche where she holds our mc's collar and headmaster be like " youth is so wonderful". !!!!. people earning the title of nobility through strength isnt unheared off. however people giving their own title also seemed like a plot hole to me. so if i dont want title of duke i can make my pet dog duke of abc kingdom. !!!!!!. our mc seems to be well adjusted in his transmigration and has also declared himself as so called 'strategeist ' by blessings of our author, however his interaction and dialogues feels much empty and forced. princess: "you talk like you know everything in this world." mc: " pfft" (chuckling) " that is true i almost know everything". since other thang being a CEO in my previous life i was also your fanboy therefore i will kill primordial demon free for you. however a few chapters back mc's brother and princess's brother humiliate him and punch him during the banquet and he takes it all. anyways, in few ways he also contradicts his own statements during the story. he is like i shouldn't take novel's mc 's cheats however the very next chapter he employs mc's informant by handing her priceless treasure which no one in this world according to mc has access to and no one is going to figure it out for a while. !!!!!!!!. there are also extras who whisper about our mc and novel's mc in this chapter. there conversation is so forced i feel i will die from cringe while listening to it. oh did i forget about one motherf**ker who keeps touching girls's chest and falling into them out of pure luck even our mc's maid so called elite which can take a whole city down by herself fell on the victim side. that dude must've worshipped jiraya for 10,000 years according to chinesse novels to gain such luck and our mc shooed him away like animal he shouldve licked his feat and begged him to give some amount of luck to his beta a**. but after reading for a while and seeing mc being so full of himself for things even a dog can do ( it's not me, you know chinesse cultivators use such phrases ) (e.g him sitting beside mc and be like see this sucker you are not the only one, who was beta cuck personality like cliche japanesse mc and power like an immortal's dog. i also have light affinity and i will use to plot lucian's demise through uou. anyways good thing in this novel are very few !. you get a new power system unlike those typical cliches. !!. i cant say anything about world building as he/she hasn't developed it that far yet. the only reason i wanted to read this because @CrimsonFable commented on this expecting a masterpiece. however it is not my cup of tea. anyways good luck for the future author. i hope you materialize this piece as you have had imagined and keep working hard

wait isnt his weapon supposed to be gun? why are glass swords there? is it translation error where his intentions were for shards not swords?

honestly this work feels less original but some elements are quite interesting like going back to life cycle. there are many themes and plots inspired by A Villain's Will to Survive. he has made character less robotic but more chaotic and emotional. look im not here to criticise anybody but you should write it in synopsis about your inspired works it feels professional and gives less reason for anyone to call your art a cheap rip off or criticise you about it. ive also read your previous work. you are always great with start but you are not able to maintain the same narrative throughout the story. but if you are able to do it perfectly this time then im rooting for you

you saved me from injesting this poison. you should not have marked it as spoiler. I ALMOST PASSED THROUGH THIS COMMENT. ANYWAYS GREAT JOB MAN!

the fanfic is on fire! I never expected a chinese author to know the essence of characters this well, usually they are always courting death by creating idiotic fanfics!! you will love it if you hate james potter and the premise is so good

plot mistake: only poor people used floo powder. that's why malfoys would never use it. they would just aparatate or use house elf. please do correct it and improve grammar