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Sure, how would I be able to reach you?

I like it, the use of actions is weak though. "Bang!" could benefit to proper use of expressions like, "A loud bang cut out next to me, deafening my hearing." Overall I like the story so far

The story is interesting I like how it progresses, you could fair well with more character development or effort towards pacing and characters that are easier to relate to. It's hard to get really into it, but it's not bad. I like it and if anyone is a fan of weak-strong progression, I would assume they'd like it

Please never comment this ever again, with full respect

I'm sorry, what?

I can assure you it's not!

What-

Because he was weak, I apologize for the late response

A-Are you okay?

The writing is nice and the flow is easy to follow! I really enjoyed it, if I had to point anything out, it'd be the story development, but even then it's easy to follow and enjoyable