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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

I can't classify myself as a newbie since I started with most top authors (Guiltythree and JKSmanga) More than four or five years ago. I quit writing at that time, and only came back recently. So, I can't say anything about the newbies way of writing! Good luck anyway.

I'm talking about pacing, and also there are other issues in the book (However, minor ones.) Well, it's possible for you to develop overtime.

Actually, it's not. If you read most top works, the paragraphs aren't like this - it's mostly longer. Check books like. Shadow Slave Lord of the Mysteries Strange Lord My Vampire System Super Gene The Legendary Mechanic Reverend Insanity And many others... In other words, your writing is the newbies' authors way of writing, I don't follow the academy and well - written novels are novels, not webnovels. No hate, but this can't be adapted into a physical book or Amazon KDP in this format of writing. Thanks once again

This is my alt account - No! Currently preparing volume 2. I suppose the book is a hit, and dropping it would be the biggest mistake I can ever make.

The paragraphs space needs work, and also short paragraphs are not advisable for writing a book, especially if you're ever looking forward to get adaptations. In contrast, the chapters are quite short and I will advise you to train more on descriptions. (An advice from a fellow author alt account) Just consider it as a reader's advice... 가능한 모든 방법으로 환영합니다.

I only tame girls.. muhahha

Liao, this is British writing.

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