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Good good, very good. Love being part of the start of your first Novel, but also hate having to wait for new chapters🥹 Also I‘d recommend putting your chapters through some kind of Grammatical AI Check. Although the errors aren‘t many to really impact the resd through, I think with little effort you can make the reading experience better👍
Love music/instruments in Novels, especially because of TOMA, so I always appreciate these chapters. Also the only MC that I know of that somewhat plays the Flute is Xu Qing from Outside of Time, so it is really refreshing. You did really good with portraying the whole scene by the way
Simple mistake …was reaching / …reached
Just another correction, or maybe I‘m too illiterate to know the original word. shoke=shook
Idk if you can edit the chapters here. Instead of floor the Author probably meant flour
Review as of Chapter 6! Style: Very intriguing and detailed style of writing. Is good at making me visualize the scenes and the Author manages to keep me interested, for example he doesn‘t repetitively start his sentences and also possesses a rich word treasure. Story: Since I‘ve just read 6 chapters as of now, I can‘t really go in-depth here. But I like the premise very much. -The different Religions/potential conflicts -The importance of the opening chapters throughout the story -The Mc and his ‚brother‘ Grammar: Though there are 3-4 errors I noticed during my read, they aren‘t so fundamentally wrong that I didn‘t understand what the Author meant to convey originally. And 3-4 small errors in 6 whole chapters for someone who is writing his first novel is pretty damn good if you ask me. This is also a point that will just improve itself naturally as the time goes on and the Author is more accustomed to writing. Character: Here I think is the point that is most surprising when you think about the fact that this is the Author‘s first novel. I love all the characters, and they aren‘t 2-dimensional at all, having their own thoughts and personalities. -Of course our homeboy Elias, who has gone through some rough times, from loved and praised by the church to scorned and somewhat abandoned. I like his personality and responsibility as a ‚big brother’. I can‘t wait to see more of him -I love 2nine since he seems like a respectable old captain -I‘m also interested in what will happen with the 5 orphan children. Will they grow up alongside Elias, or will something else happen?