Gomerit

You are also the epitome of bad taste, you wrote a comment without understanding anything

It's a shame that such a beautiful book was thrown into the back rows.... You are really talented at writing. It was a book that opened my imagination. Read it, you won't regret it....

What inspiration is the same...

Instead of the show but dont tell technique, the used tell but dont show technique 😂😂😂

Evaluate it in the context of the subject, this man is not jireya, it is misspelled...But it's very disturbing...

You should introduce the speaker first and then write the speech; otherwise, the reader has to watch the end of the speech first to understand who's really speaking. Other than that, things like torture are quite good, even if they're not my style. While the perspectives are nice, the other character remains an NPC. I mean, why is it that only Charles reacts? Every knight with him should have a reaction as well. For example, playing chess together at first makes them feel alive, but then they don't even talk. And that's not all there is to it; the Finns and other factions are the same. The real problem here isn't that they don't talk; it's that they sometimes talk and the rest of the time they act like idols. Also, loyalty initially made sense because it was a different culture, but the sudden increase in loyalty among the people of Westeros was absurd. Another issue is that there was a one-eyed nobleman, for example, who was forgotten. The mystery in the story isn't fully fleshed out. Because, for example, when we didn't see Loyhar from his perspective, he was a very cool character who couldn't forget his past pain. But when you read his perspective later, he seems like a fool. It seemed to me that he was once a very intelligent nobleman, but his helpless actions next to the king created a contrast. He actually had great potential. If we'd only seen him occasionally, if we'd only heard about his heroic deeds, I think he would have become a legendary character.

.Read it, you won't regret it... I read until chapter 200, it was perfect from character continuity to character development, from world building to its system.

It was impressive... It is one of the rare articles that is written without real coercion. Actually, there are a lot of comments to say, but I won't give a spoiler. Read on, you won't regret it...

Perfect.

But I love your story... Well done, you wrote very well