JackYoda

Thanks for the chapter / Gracias por el capitulo I like cookies / Me gustan las galletas

Thanks for the chapter / Gracias por el capitulo I like cookies / Me gustan las galletas

Thanks for the chapter / Gracias por el capitulo I like cookies / Me gustan las galletas

Thanks for the chapter / Gracias por el capitulo I like cookies / Me gustan las galletas

There are people who don't know martial Peak, Bleach, Naruto, or many of the terms, since these skills are part of these universes, UGH, there are people who have only seen Boruto (nothing against)

Oh and I forgot to say, but I have no idea why there are two guys in the zampakuto, and I don't even know why the protagonist knows he was in the zanpakuto, and you should tell us why, through the dialogues, if the protagonist asks where he is and the guy answers, I will know where he is, if the protagonist looks around while he is inside the zanpakuto and you write what he's seeing, I'll know what it's like inside.

Ok... Now this gets weird, let's go in parts. 1st, author, you are too rushing into what is next and not appreciating where you currently are, what I mean is that your writing is skipping A LOT of things, like, What does this cliff the protagonist is farming on look like? Is he outdoors or inside the cliff? How did he get there? What's around you these days? Where was he at the beginning of the chapter? among many others, you are rushing too much, CALM DOWN, breathe, think about your surroundings and write about it calmly, we have time (mostly... Maybe?) 2nd, it has a little to do with what I mentioned in "1st", the protagonist didn't meet or see anyone along the entire way? there was no interaction with anything after he left to cultivate, no feeling of unknown from being in a new world? no feeling when getting stronger? Didn't anyone wonder where the protagonist is even after he's been gone for a while? basically, there are no living beings besides the protagonist and yang Chen (I don't remember if that's his name) and the protagonist looks like a robot, with a goal to fulfill and simply doing it for the sake of doing it. 3rd, Dialogues... I know you're a reader and this is probably your first work so I understand, but I still have to say, there are no dialogues, just information dumps like a wiki, basically, you are dumping information as if everyone knows everything, we are not all-knowing, nor is the protagonist (as far as I know), There's no need to rush author, take your time, dialogues are necessary because we don't know what's in your mind or what you're trying to convey, dumping information will only make reading boring and tiring. 4th, Since he advanced from nothing from 1 to 5 in his cultivation just in someone days (maybe less), I know that it's just a basic realm and that advancing may be easy, but it's very fast. I like cookies

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I think it's because you gave him the skeleton in the 2nd (?) chapter, as well as the secret arts and some other secret arts, BUT, don't mind that, you can't please everyone, So keep up the good work! And don't give up! (And don't even die!) PS: I'm not sure if giving too many "secret" arts in less than 5 chapters is why he thinks you strengthened him too quickly ( and honestly, I disagree with him, the protagonist so far only has knowledge and has only literally stepped on the path of cultivation, there are MANY people stronger than him, so I think giving him some power ups in 1 chapter isn't a big deal, just something necessary) I like cookies

Thanks for the chapter / Gracias por el capitulo I like cookies / Me gustan las galletas