I make a bet here, this story will be good and people will think about it like a great story. Yeah I don't know how to compliment stories correctly but hey, this novel for the moment is good, the characters are good, what do you wait? No seriously I don't know what do you wait, go read this, good experience here guaranteed.

If this quality remains the same for all the chapters, I have no worries for the future.

Bro deserve the belt

Do like me, write in your laptop and cut your paragraphs with your phone account. Like this you avoid any bad surprises.

I notice that you have some paragraph who are pretty long in your text for no reason. Sometimes when you have a point, it's better to jump the line if you want to fluidify your dialogues or descriptions. It's something I can't imagine not doing it when I post my chapters, I hope my advices are helpful.

Don't worry, I will come. It's difficult for me to say you no when you make a proposal like this. You can't imagine how much this proposal makes me happy, sincerely thank you.

Okay, keep up, champion.

Good introduction chapter, I just find the words he pronounce before he die a little bit strange. He didn't think about his family at all, he just don't care anymore about his Dad or I misunderstood something?

Thank you for the review, this kind of review motivates me even more to continue the writing aeventure. Back-stories, mysteries and fights, that's the dishes I love the most, and also the dishes that this novel offer you from the beginning until the end. I hope everyone will love my cooking skills.

It feels a bit akward to see your comment posted 2 times, I prefer rectify the shot like this.

Sorry, this comment duplicate when I tried to delete the first comment, I'm still not used to this app for now unfortunately. Since we come to this, I want to tell that I can make a more detailed review of your novel in discord if you want, I read the 10 chapters. This can be interesting for you.

The overall vibe is good for me and the Reading was plaisant.

Okay.

Thanks, I don't see it at first.

I see what you mean, go forward then.

I'm not sure about the head in the bag, you can replace this by a shocking revelation throughout the letter. Otherwise it's quite rude, don't you think?

I think it sound like a little forced. You should, in my opinion, take in on account that nobility use a certain etiquette, and when a person break this etiquette, we are not trying to cover it up but to cover up the error. You can consider this advice useful for you or not.

Okay, it was me then.

I didn't precise, there a reason behind this style of description, it's related to the narrator, but with your actual knowledge on the novel, it's impossible for you to know why. (Apart from imagine all the theories possible)