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HC_Pwnography2mthPosted- HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
Had to go back to here to figure out what "FCS" meant. If you are gonna use an acronym in the future, put it in (FCS) when you first introduce the unabreviated version at the very least. Makes it easier for the reader to recognize/understand it if it pops up later in the story.
"Let's go to the Flagbearers Confirmation Section now," Drishti moved towards the doors, stating the work needed to confirm his participation in their battle. - HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
don't you mean Regina Devareaux? you mixed both their names
This paragraph has been deleted. - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to TwistedTsunami
yeah, I question the use of the "harem" tag as just clickbait
"Huh, isn't that obvious? Add me to your Harem." - HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
"Henna" backwards...
"What do you know about Anneh?" Ryuk turned towards Alfred, his cold gaze remembering someone. - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to HC_Pwnography
let's not forget this "naive" child has been knowingly avoiding ingesting the suppressant from Alisia for the past 6 years or whatever.
Suddenly, a realization dawned within her, causing her to understand the hidden meaning behind Ryuk's words. 'he definitely want me to become parmanent seller?' - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to A4KL
that's a weak excuse in my opinion. either she's a dimwit, or what the OP described her as. cause there's a very clear distinction between how OP describes her in earlier chapters and how she acts now. it's not a clear case of just being a child and changing one's demeanor on a whim.
Suddenly, a realization dawned within her, causing her to understand the hidden meaning behind Ryuk's words. 'he definitely want me to become parmanent seller?' - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to CrownlesMonarch
her age was quite obviously told to you at the end of the previous chapter.
Yui's figure disappeared into thin air, leaving behind a poison that filled the room in an instant, melting down everyone inside. - HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
wait, the paragraph above and this paragraph contradicts. above you say time moves slower in this dimension. in this paragraph time moves faster in this dimension.
A total of two months outside was equal to one year inside. - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to Tavares_Doughty
adanyl and yui's mother
'Forgive me, Laila, but my child is more important.' - HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
uhh, check your grammar here
"Insolent bastard!"Seraphina screamed."If I had my power unsealed, I could blow you with a mere cough." - HC_Pwnography2mthCommented
not gloating here... but I figured that his assassin name would be something significant, so I figured it out immediately. I just couldn't figure out why "star"...
"Shut up! You just want to get rid of me but it's not going to happen Noel. I will be like a shackle that is bound to you until the end of your life." - HC_Pwnography2mthReplied to Jaden_Wagner
I have to agree this is just getting old and repetitive.
Finally, he sighed and said: "Okay, Lilith, I agree to be your student." - HC_Pwnography3mthCommentedSam suddenly looked up, his face almost touching her vagin.
- HC_Pwnography3mthCommented
again
The abrupt hiatus in their usual nightly intimacies brought forth an unexpected but nonetheless welcomed sense of relief to Willow. - HC_Pwnography3mthCommented
again
It was a testament to the unfathomable complexity of the human soul, the inexplicable capacity for metamorphosis and redemption that both baffled and intrigued him in equal measure. - HC_Pwnography3mthCommented
there it is again
As she lay there, contemplating the mysteries of her own feelings, she resolved to embrace this unconventional journey, prepared to traverse its unexpected twists and turns, guided by the unwavering compass of her love for him. - HC_Pwnography3mthCommented
3 repeated paragraphs again
The amalgamation of fear and fascination left her grappling with a myriad of emotions, each moment with this mysterious figure unraveling an uncharted tapestry of uncertainty and intrigue. - HC_Pwnography3mthCommented
seems to be a common occurrence in this novel, where the same paragraph is repeated 3 times, just restructured each time. It's common when using AI.
This unforeseen leap in her cultivation prowess was a catalyst that fueled her determination, unveiling the uncharted territories of potential waiting to be explored on her journey to mastery.