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J_D_Johnathan

J_D_Johnathan

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Hello guys(and ladies). I am Author-kun, or Immortal-kun as I liked to call myself. I am just another random dude trying to make up the best stories he could come up with. IMMORTAL-KUN OUT

2023-10-20 JoinedGlobal
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan1d
    Replied to SugarApostle

    no, it was 2000+.

    But he had hit the Creator's daughter. He knew who she was. He knew who her father was. But blinded by the extreme vanity that plagued this mind, he went through it. After all, Milim was under his control, and her father had not reincarnated for 2000 years, so nothing could go wrong.
    Tensura: Chronicles of the Star-King
    Anime & Comics · J_D_Johnathan
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Crapemyrtle69

    ig i have to rejoin, i thought it was someone else's

    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Crapemyrtle69

    hold on, first tell me the name of the server, i'm confused if i'm in it or not

    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Crapemyrtle69

    do i know you in the server? I'm @The_Star_King or @Clapped_Lucia btw

    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Primordial_Seven

    alr

    Ch 4 Professions
    Endless Cultivation
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Primordial_Seven

    ic

    'Sorry for lying to you, father, but you won't allow me to learn them otherwise.'
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Primordial_Seven

    *chan

    He only learned these three to focus on them first. His thirst for knowledge was insatiable.
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Primordial_Seven

    ic

    Professions
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Replied to Crapemyrtle69

    huh? are you the proofreader?

    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    again, you don't have to write "chapter 5" manually again Also, I will read this chap later

    Flame Manipulation Technique
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    this one is better in vocabulary, but the pacing is too fast. Most of the childhood is kind of ignored basically and mc's emotions with the parents is not given much time. also, use pov. It would be better unless a big complex scene is in place

    Ch 4 Professions
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    this will be good along with the heaven devouring codex, since he's inner energy is likely enormous from what i could tell reading the previous chapters

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    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    called it

    "Don't worry, Mother, I know what I'm doing, so you can rest assured."
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    you are becoming too detached to them my guy, feelings can change if you stay away for too long

    In this life, he had such loving parents. That's why he was trying to learn different paths so he could help his family who gave him such warmth.
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    advise to be ignored by the mc lol

    "Tian'er, you should also rest and relax your mind. Don't always stay cooped up in the library or cultivating. Rest is also important to relax your mind."
    Endless Cultivation
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    i still don't understand how his father did not catch up his traininf all this time

    'Sorry for lying to you, father, but you won't allow me to learn them otherwise.'
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    MC: Heh, NOOB. I am the MC

    "Brat, don't chew more than you can eat. A person can't even reach the peak of one profession without wasting millions or billions of years, and you want to study three professions at a time?"
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    i feel like the mc is too detached sometimes but also seems close to his parents sometimes

    'If I said I wanted to learn all the paths, he would definitely beat me up. I'm still not strong enough to run away from him.'
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    MC: I want to go inside the heavenly dao(and he will)

    "My good son, on which path of the Great Dao have you decided to walk on?"
    Endless Cultivation
    Fantasy · Primordial_Seven
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  • J_D_Johnathan
    J_D_Johnathan2d
    Commented

    in a web novel, there is little need to point out simple details, but do try to keep the story well paced and explored, the current pace is kinda fast

    After knocking two times and hearing his father's voice, he opened the door and came in front of his parents. He was around 180cm tall with pure white hair and deep blue eyes with milky skin. He was one of the most handsome young masters of the Divine Radiance realm.
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