"If the past is a lesson to learn from, and the future is a chance worth waiting for, then does that make the present the crossroads where mistakes meet opportunity?"
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I was gonna say something, but somehow I forget what it is, weird huh ?
I didn't read past the prologue, so I can't really review this fanfic fairly, so I'm basing it off of the first chapter witch felt like big organized mess in a nutshell, confusing as Heck and weird, I don't know if it gets better From here so don't take my review as way to see if you want to read this story, other then that to me the story's first chapter is what attracts readers to continue ... Well reading said story, and it didn't click with me I guess .
Honestly it's a good story, but the OC/MC is a boring person and quiet lazy, and passing of the chapters is just the author narrating events that happen like : " Steve woke up a 7:00, brushed his teeth, ate breakfast, talked te his parents ... Etc" it's very monotone and predictable .
Good point on that one, and yes your suggestion would work well and your story will be built more on making character development through emotional and physical connections between crew members either current or new ones that would otherwise be built in the background, and it was awesome that you listened to my Criticism, keep up the good work .
Yeah sure, but still why are you rushing their strength growth, it will only make it seem like Luffy's almost 4 years of training like it's a joke and there was no reason for it, especially haki training, it is stated in the one piece world that anyone can train haki but not everyone can advance in it easily, it needs strong will, so it's better for you rewrite these past chapters and go for a moderate speed of growth in strength at least, that's my advice for you whether you do it or not is up to you, so good luck✌️.
It started out so good, although some things in the story sounded a bit too cliche like the ship fruit and the Nika from the future, it still was good until he started training his crew, I mean sure there is a difference between training oneself and others but still two fucking weeks and most of them know auto,geppo and haki , now that's bullshit and you know, why are you rushing their strength growth so hard, even he himself took like 1 year to grasp haki to the advanced stage and here Zoro does it in two fucking weeks, come on !!!!.
I'm having a hard time understanding what's going on, zoro's haki is nearing the advanced stage in two weeks !!!?, I'm not the only seeing this shit right ?
My thoughts exactly
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