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i know i am new to reading online novels and such...but it's my first time connecting and understanding an Ai "feelings" i can tell that the author is talented.

wow...just wow... reading this while listening to "Daylight--David kushner" gave me chills... it just have that vibe ya know...here have a stone.

autocorrect is a bitch... hope it makes some sense at least.

Okay.... I will be honest when I started reading I was a bit excited to read about a Zoan fruit user. after reading chapter 1 I thought that the author writing style was only going to be like that for the first chapter rushed rarely getting talking about the characters emotions or his acceptance of the world of one piece. talking about worlds we know next to nothing about his personality we don't know his background or how he lived on earth. so far to me this character feels kind of like cardboard 2D even I can't seem to care about what he does. In fact as far as I have read ( till chapter 5) all the characters where introduce briefly and we're rarely expended. in fact I don't believe the mc has talked to any of the characters (straw hat crew) to at least get a hint of his personality. of course we already get a hang of the straw hat crew personality but come on at least introduce your character personality. then there is plot so far you haven't explained to us why exactly does straw hat we're looking for that fruit it was kinda of out character for them. I guess you just needed your MC to have some sort of connection to them. but anyways I know you might know have a lot of experience in writing but I recommend you take a look around the site to at least get a hang of how to develop a story because so far this story has potential but it's being stopped by your lack of experience. honest review here

felt a bit rushed and the conversation a bit just a bit to forced but i can see potential in this. I'm excited can't wait

i get your pain. playing cod at night with light off and some random due throws a flash grenade...it's really annoying

What are you talking about? given the circumstance of the Mc it's normal to be thank full and some times a hug shows that emotion well.My father works as a surgeon and even he told me he can't count how many times he was hugged by people because of how thankful they are to have been saved. to relate that to the story we see here that Lilith literary reignited hope for MC that his family could alive resulting in a hug out of pure emotional outburst.In what world is that cringe? pls post this type of comment of you lack EQ.

ps I was crying while typing this so my spelling might be bad