Overall, a very honest attempt. Very interesting world background, you can surely build up upon that. I would like to say that, it could be way better if you paced the story in such a way that we, as readers could glimpse the world and the characters intention on our own. The various informations in the beginning could be edited, grammar needs some work. Overall, interesting concept.

I started reading it from the middle, so here are some of my impressions. first, I liked it a lot better than if I had started reading from the beginning. the reason being the specific kind of writing style (very much like the Japanese style light-novels, which I usually don't like). there are no descriptions of surroundings, mostly the story relies on conversation and actions of the protagonist and his team. But even the style (with name of speakers coming after the dialogue) started to become irrelevant and not as much distracting. when i reached the end, it became obvious why this style would go so well with this writing style. second, the characters and their interactions were very catchy. they have very well written character depth, you could easily find their quirks.third, I would like more descriptions of the world please! Descriptions specifically about surroundings and buildings and such like so that it becomes more easy for imagination. And that's it. I didn't imagine I would get so invested. But this very old-japanese style adventure story really has some perks and will continue to chase later on. Best of luck writing.

The protagonist of this book is really grey on moral spectrum, which kind of leaves a lot of interesting choices for later development. She is, though a very archetypal 'villainous', but she is no dainty innocent 'victim'— very well put by the author, a 'scorned' character hellbent on revenge (and for which she can do anything).The background setting is very cool, all serve the story very well. the later chapters I hope will flesh out many background characters and their intentions. Though it appears to have too many adjectives and description in the beginning— if anyone is impressed by the story introduction and wants to read, I would recommend jumping to chapter 3/4 and then re-read the first two as a prologue. interestingly paced storyline that really pushes you into scrolling and keep scrolling.

It's an intriguing idea, very adventure like, with well spaced development. Would like though if you could develop more in line with more descriptions of the surrounding. It will give your writing more feelings. Loved it.

Your attention to details are really nice. there is plentiful imagery to set a tone for the following action, interesting as it sounds if does at moments feel a bit too descriptive. I find that issue in my own writing so, I can't say what needs to be averted, but i personally like descriptions a lot, small details, sounds, action and emotions. I liked your writing, and I wish you best, please continue writing with as much vigor and joy as you did in the beginning. It shows.

Gripping tale. the pace, the writing quality, or the imagery portrayed by the mc, everything was good. there were slight moments in the beginning when one would want to not let the overstressing of certain emotions, or say, phrases repeatedly...but later on it itself begins to feel like a essential for sketching out the character more clearly? Loved it, would like to revisit of in free time.

Will do in next editing😅

The writing style is really good. Though the pace may seem fast at times, but still the characters development itself saves it. The idea is good, and the background development prompting the main characters are well laid out. Loved the style of writing.

Wonderful beginning. Though it's just one chapter but I can feel the potential it holds. The pacing, the mysterious elements and a glimpse of the outer world. Great work.

There are actually many nice ones out there, if you are into them, really 😃.I appreciate your thought, and that you liked my mc. also thanks for review.

thanks for the feedback.☺️

Glad you liked them.

thankyou for the support, and I will for sure 😊. please continue reading it, it really helps with encouragement.

Thankyou so much for these kind words.☺️

A nice beginning 👌 good job with that. Will need some tweaking, a little bit of more showing (descriptive writing) than simply telling it to us readers. Overall, it is okay.

A very nicely written story. The overall pace was good, character interactions were engaging, and the exploration of world around it — with an interesting worldview, it is ripe for the adventures. There were slight grammatical errors, or perhaps the usage of informal writing like (u, k) and stuff which could be revised ( if it isn't there for some specific purpose, that is). The dialogues can be spaced apart for easy readability. Overall a fascinating beginning, hope you will continue to write.

You can try spacing the two dialogues between different speakers. it will look more clearer and legible.☺️

A nice beginning, would love to read it further please keep writing. The writing style is fluid enough, a little more effort to brush it up a notch higher. Characters were drawn good, but there were several weird decisions they made (which According to me didn't fit in their nature) but if may have so something to do with foreshadowing so. The thing I liked the most is the overall atmosphere, or world building, it gives the right kind of vibes for a elven tale . Thankyou for sharing and keep writing.

Very interesting beginning. All the characters were quite fleshed out, the rhythm, the flow everything was amazing and in line with the genre. The story grows on you once you get on with first three chapters, you will like to really keep on reading. Especially, the characters and their interactions.

Hi، everyone whoever happens to pass by this story! I am the author here۔ Though it feels wierd reviewing your own work but I just wanted to set a kind of reminder for myself. Reading it for myself trying to view it partially is ofcourse very difficult, but let's just put it all away at once. yeah.The element that the beginning of my story carries is mystery. it's filled with co relations. How much I have done justice to that I Don't have any inkling. Another thing I am pursuing is sketching out emotions as much as possible. Not tears but simply letting emotions flow. Which many of my characters do freely, even though there are many constraints on them. I have planned a lot for this tale. I wish my future self have kept the pace going.finally please give this story a try and feel for yourself. this review was kind of for those who might pass by without seeing any reviews or rating. though it is still, authors, my own, but it just kind of feels like okay to do? On the other note, I like to hear any kind of constructive criticism, however harsh they maybe, very much. please feel free to give me ideas, or what I missed out.thankyou for being hereand welcome