Cloude237

I started reading it from the middle, so here are some of my impressions. first, I liked it a lot better than if I had started reading from the beginning. the reason being the specific kind of writing style (very much like the Japanese style light-novels, which I usually don't like). there are no descriptions of surroundings, mostly the story relies on conversation and actions of the protagonist and his team. But even the style (with name of speakers coming after the dialogue) started to become irrelevant and not as much distracting. when i reached the end, it became obvious why this style would go so well with this writing style. second, the characters and their interactions were very catchy. they have very well written character depth, you could easily find their quirks.third, I would like more descriptions of the world please! Descriptions specifically about surroundings and buildings and such like so that it becomes more easy for imagination. And that's it. I didn't imagine I would get so invested. But this very old-japanese style adventure story really has some perks and will continue to chase later on. Best of luck writing.

Will do in next editing😅

There are actually many nice ones out there, if you are into them, really 😃.I appreciate your thought, and that you liked my mc. also thanks for review.

thanks for the feedback.☺️

Glad you liked them.

thankyou for the support, and I will for sure 😊. please continue reading it, it really helps with encouragement.

Thankyou so much for these kind words.☺️

You can try spacing the two dialogues between different speakers. it will look more clearer and legible.☺️

Hi، everyone whoever happens to pass by this story! I am the author here۔ Though it feels wierd reviewing your own work but I just wanted to set a kind of reminder for myself. Reading it for myself trying to view it partially is ofcourse very difficult, but let's just put it all away at once. yeah.The element that the beginning of my story carries is mystery. it's filled with co relations. How much I have done justice to that I Don't have any inkling. Another thing I am pursuing is sketching out emotions as much as possible. Not tears but simply letting emotions flow. Which many of my characters do freely, even though there are many constraints on them. I have planned a lot for this tale. I wish my future self have kept the pace going.finally please give this story a try and feel for yourself. this review was kind of for those who might pass by without seeing any reviews or rating. though it is still, authors, my own, but it just kind of feels like okay to do? On the other note, I like to hear any kind of constructive criticism, however harsh they maybe, very much. please feel free to give me ideas, or what I missed out.thankyou for being hereand welcome