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Lo_rezi006mthPostedFirstly I'd love to start with the synopsis like I usually do as the synopsis is one that determines if your book gets readers or not and if your book is going to survived.the length of the synopsis I perfect but the quality is poor sorry to say.I'd prefer you make it more suspending to arise readers curiosity about the main character that literally listingt out what happened to the main character or what's going to happenthe novel is a nice one and has strong potentials and I urge our author to please develop more ^_^
- Lo_rezi006mthCommentedCh 3 What are you?
- Lo_rezi006mthCommented
why do I feel all these ain't gonna end well?:-\
Guys and men were all dressed in expensive wears and that was perfect for this particular situation, while the ladies were mostly dressed in revealing clothes that made their features rather profound. Only a few ladies thought it was best to dress in something more proper. - Lo_rezi006mthPosted
this book is super intruding and has lots of potential.it's surely going to do well once our author improves herself.firstly the synopsis need some development to capture the readers same with the narration.I know everyone has their own perspective when it comes to narrationbut I'd like to ask if our author is writing a prose or drama?sorry if I sounded too inquisitive but I hope our author can do better.
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I miss these days
The school bell rang, and with that familiar "Tun Tun," the students hurriedly gathered their things, eager to leave their classrooms. - Lo_rezi006mthPosted
- Lo_rezi009mthReplied to Adam_Aksara
- Lo_rezi009mthCommented
sometimes the paragraphs are a little big jam packed pls try spacing them a bit
These survivers were not using those long ranged weapons like guns and blasters because the manufacturers of those items stopped making those weapons. After all, in a situation like this, who will dare to open business? Unless they are nuts because money at this moment was useless and not only that but the world will not sit back and wait for them to make those weapons. They were competing here where the strongest person survive, it didn't matter whether the world or the survivers were shameless enough to take out the other when they were not ready yet, they will do that especially when they found out that the other was weak and careless. Even if the guns would have been here, they may have been useless to them, the entities that they usually fought with were not normal beings, they had a very hard carapaces covering them that a bullet can not penetrate. Only these modified weapons which they had forged them themselves can be of use. - Lo_rezi009mthCommentedCh 1 INTRODUCTION 1(The beginning of the end - Genesis)
- Lo_rezi009mthPosted
great work author pls keep the flag flying, love how the story unveilsI'm gonna follow through with it^_^
This book has been deleted. - Lo_rezi009mthReplied to empressblackrose09