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I don't think you need an extra world in the dialogue feels repetitive
There was a lot of mistakes in grammar, the dialogue felt out of place, it felt unnatural, the father and mother spoke in a way that didn't show affection only just saying lore or explaining what a thing is and what it can do. I recommend that you show not tell, for example when the father introduced the AI aspect, you could've made him show what it could instead of just telling what it can do. overall its not bad, for a non-native English speaker this is actually very advance nice job!