can you read mine? I need a sincere reviews like this on the first chapter of my novel. "As We Grew Apart." It's the name of my novel.

if my writing is this smooth and clear, I would've won tournaments. The only thing I could say about the plot is that it's easygoing but I didn't feel anything cuz I've read hundreds of this. but if I was a first-time reader, I would've felt the thrill coming inside me.

this is why auto-correct sucks.

Hey! I'm writing a masterpiece and would love your honest feedback. Your opinion means a lot to me. Would you mind taking a look? Thanks in advance! want honest review.

I'll stop writing for a week since our tests at my school are about to start but I will make sure that my comeback will be epic. Sorry for the inconvenience I caused.

Wow... The story is better than my expectations. I could see you put so much effort and time into doing all this writing. The story is interesting but there are times that the story made me bored because my mind didn't ask that many questions about the story. Sometimes the paragraphs are too long and I don't have a problem with that since I'm a nerd but it has been proven that the human mind chooses to read shorter paragraphs because it looks clearer and easier to read than bigger ones. The descriptions are good, even better than most novels but put it in mind that It's harder to imagine, the more information there is, so try to put in the necessary amount of needed information and don't overload because that would put a burden on the readers mind making them annoyed and then stop reading the novel. You don't need to change it because it's already perfectly fine. Good luck my fellow writer and if you have time, can you also check mine? It's called 'Zero Degrees Celsius' and thank you for reading this paragraph of a newbie writer that could only see the mistakes of others not his own. Also, when you read mine please also write a review, so i can be guided better in my path.

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Your writing was rather unique... This is the first time I've seen a writing like this but it needs more improvement. -Paragraphs are sometimes big and sometimes long -The character doesn't have many descriptions including the place -The story is good but it needs more depth -The character's dialogues sometimes feel like robots -The actions don't really show many details This might be your first time writing a novel and I know what you feel right now since I have felt that but I recommend that you keep going while looking back at your mistakes, I can assure you, there will be many improvements you will gain.

The story is better than most novels and more original than others, it still needs a description of their appearance. I understand that you want everyone to know their appearance through imagination and their vivid personalities and I like that... that's why you deserve 5 stars but it still needs more depth about the characters.

True, I guess...

This is a good start for a novel, it has the same vibe as the start of demon slayer...

I know that feeling...

thank you, I'll try my best.

it could be either was or is, doesn't really matter as long as you create a good image.

please read mine too, it's "Zero Degrees Celsius"

I can't say much because it's just the first chapter but I think this story will be great, still can't say much since it's the first chapter.

YEhey, no one dies now. this will be interesting.

So dying won't exist there now, wish that could happen on earth 4 years ago.

Men, if only killing yourself is this easy, I would've done it.

Got used hearing this in novels and isekai's that I don't even know how to react...