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MidsummerDaybreak

MidsummerDaybreak

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2023-05-08 JoinedIndonesia
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    It's a cliche plot. But it's surprisingly good although I've just read about first ten chapters. But the other side characters seem to lack some substances. But aside from that, I like that the MC is not acting too complacent or lustful like in usual story with cliché tropes. Although he received a very strong skill, he still preferred his peaceful life. I can only say one thing for this kind of MC, "lucky bastard!" Good luck, author! :)

    Celestial Bloodline
    Fantasy · _Orange_
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to _Orange_

    Thank you for your suggestion! Please stay tune to follow Arthur's journey closely :)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to MidsummerDaybreak

    Maybe you can take references from other novels. Observe how each author portray different characters. You can also observe their writing styles. Don't be too focused on the world building and story plot. The interactions between the characters and their emotional input in different situations are also important to make the readers engrossed in the story. Break a leg!

    The Rakshas Apocalypse
    Urban · LordShivaStories
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    Hello! Another greetings from the author. Now then, I think that maybe some of the readers are quite confused with the countries mentioned in this story and their geographical positions. And so, I attached a prototype of the Map of Eos in this review. Although because it is a prototype, there might still be some names that haven't or need to be changed later. For example, Andalus have been changed to Eandalus. I'll also keep note and post a reply when changing the names written on the map. Thank you very much! May you have a fun time reading :)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to LordShivaStories

    Thanks a lot! :)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    Well then. To tell the truth, this story was surprisingly good. It has a potential from its premise. The pace is not too fast either. Now the lacking part is the execution of the idea. If I can say, the narrative is lacking in description and too casual. You need to put a difference between the narratives and dialogues to make the story more beautiful. As for the characters, well, honestly, I can't find anything to make them stand out and they also seem to lack emotions. Perhaps you can develop the characters more to make them more charming and interesting. Wishing you a pleasant journey :)

    The Rakshas Apocalypse
    Urban · LordShivaStories
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    Now then, where should I start first? In fact, I haven't read any xianxia novels in the last few months. S in the beginning, I need to recall how the cultivation world work first. Honestly, I think the story is quite good. But maybe you can add a little more description to your narratives. I also have quite a confusion in differentiating between the narratives and Ba Yihan's thought. How about you also give each character some kind of trait that only each of them has? It will give some kind of unique vibes that stand out from others. Overall, although the genre of BL is personally not my usual cup of tea, I've a good time enjoying it. Wish you the best on your journey :)

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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to Idyllic_Scribe

    Thank you :) Hope you witness our journey in this story.

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to Flattened_Rice_007

    Thank you very much for your review. I will ensure to give a better quality for the next chapters ;)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Replied to Kevin_007

    Thank you! Wish you all the best too :)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    Hello, this is our first time writing a novel. In fact, we have gathered the ideas for this story since quite a long time. But, until before, we have some hesitations to publish it. Please give us an honest review to better our story. Thank you :)

    Altar of Mnemosyne
    Urban · MidsummerDaybreak
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    To be honest, the start of the story was quite sudden. As if you are told to ride a rollercoaster without any reminders. But, I think that the premise and the concept themselves are interesting. The writing style is also narrative and descriptive enough. Still, I suggest to add some clues as whether the characters are talking in their minds or not, because if you just enclose them in brackets it can be a little confusing ;P. Wishing you an enjoyable journey.

    Moonlit Identity [BL]
    LGBT+ · Flattened_Rice_007
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    How should I put it ... I love the premise, the concept and the characters, but, to be honest, I'm not a fan of the world building concept. It's like drinking your favourite tea but you find that one of the cookies you eat have lesser flavor than the others. It's just a personal preference, so please don't mind it. All in all, I wish that you have a pleasant journey ;)

    Rebirth of Gotha
    Fantasy · Rooxerer
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    Truly! I really loved this kind of anti-hero and bloody story! It gives off a certain charm, yet, if one is unable to execute the concept beautifully, it will just become a normal goric story. Your story itself gives an interesting premise and concept. Although I'm not able to give a more detailed review as I have yet to read further chapters, but I can see that the story will get more interesting as the chapters passed. Wishing you a happy journey ;)

    The Uncrowned King Of Assassins
    Action · Mi_22
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    To be honest, this kind of story was not my cup of usual tea. But overall, I think the story is quite good. Still, you can add more narratives to make the story more descriptive and enjoyable to read. You should also pay attention to the punctuation marks, perhaps you can take example from other books. Hoping you a wonderful journey to complete your story ;)

    Time For Vengeance
    Action · Patience_Agboola
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  • MidsummerDaybreak
    MidsummerDaybreak1yr
    Posted

    I have read the first few chapters and overall, I think that the premise was quite interesting. I have read a few stories with almost similar concepts, and the part that I like the most is the fact that the MC of this story isn't just a mere observer although he knows that he has reincarnated into a novel he read. He is trying to become someone who truly live in that world. I hope that you can complete this story smoothly. P.S. Please pay attention to the typos :)

    Destiny's Alter
    Fantasy · B8te
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