Naonoe

How can a person with child abuse and child neglect charges be allowed to run a fkn school? Irl such people would lose any right to carry any kind of authoritative position over children if they have committed those crimes. Though I do understand that without Dumblydork in that position the author would have to find another antagonist which may be difficult for a fleshed out story unless it is an OC. But then with it being fanfiction, not all readers like OC characters with a prominent role.. Unless there is an OC antagonist that caused him to be sent to that world with those cheats required to survive the trials to come :P But then again it feels a bit forced having Dumblydork allowed to remain having authority over children as someone who has committed such disgusting crimes against a TODDLER. To still be allowed in authority over kids.. Even if their laws are backwards by centuries and corruption is rampant, I still do not believe he would be allowed in his position. Even if having tenure, you can still be dismissed for justifiable reasons, IE child abuse and child neglect. The story has potential and I do like it so far. Sadly this will probably be a breaking point for me.

Fair enough, I am no sleep specialist. Only basing my view on my own experiences. Also I have not been trained in the military so I am unsure how long they take to go from sleeping like a log while in a food coma to battle readiness. Instead of myself, knowing I would not be able to wake up in that state even if someone played loud music next to my head. This way it made me feel it was a forced plot even if maybe it is based on scientific research, since it does not match my own patterns.

The story is okay, just that the way to force the plot forward was kind of meh. When hunting down the fire nation soldiers in the south pole, instead of waiting until everyone but the lookout was asleep he outed himself at once. Instead of waiting for morpheus to claim everyone but the lookout, then assassinating the lookout and simply killing the rest in their sleep silently. Instead he outs himself, puts himself in unnecessary danger, lets one escape to alert others for plot progression and puts everyone else in his tribe in danger.. That lost me for the story.

Writing quality greatly improved with proper spacing. Very easy to read now ^^ .........................................................................

Use grammarly, spacing is used in the middle of sentences which is a real bother to read. I liked the premises but cant read this without propper wording. An example would be "Aman" instead of "A man"...................................................................................................................................................

Thanks :D

I have read one that finished, but where MC reincarnated into Roran called "Stronghammer". It is a good read ^^

Please tell me that this fanfic is stolen or shared, I am addicted and want to read ahead by 400 chapters at the very least!! ................................................................................................................................................

because the story is stolen, girl died in space for plot reasons that the thief/lender would not change

It's always been a black lightsaber since when he got it from Ilum. Maybe mixing things up from other stories?