DaoistTA2TIv
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Я думаю, либо перегрузку клеток, либо высокую бодрость, ведь криптонцы поглощают солнце для зарядки себя.
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Hello, the author liked the idea, but there are flaws in the letter if you fix them, it will be easier for people to read. For example, make more digressions, otherwise it's hard to read large paragraphs.Also, make more descriptions (of water) in the text and even when other characters think, write p-s on his behalf or attribute who said or thought it, otherwise it is not clear whose thoughts and speech it is. In general, when other characters speak or think, or the authors usually write from them in a different paragraph, so it's easier to understand who is talking or when the last one finished speaking. But you probably already know this, because when you read others, you can see how the author wrote and what tricks he used and gain experience due to this. Good luck starting your writing career[img=recommend]. (Google Translator)
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