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Bro what is this, did webnovel itself oublish this? This is copyright

Peak philosphy🔥🔥 ye oil up the mc! Make em feel the grind and the pain, make it a fight through diamonds🔥🔥👨‍🚒🔥 ye but reading it maybe fix the way you describe things, its kinda confusing and you reiterate the same idea too much, the first chap is barely recognizable from how long the paragraphs are, maybe add some plot points but if its just an auxiliarry chap it could work, but now since uts the first chap nothing is actually happening

Cool story. One problem: The first chapter tries way too hard to be deep. It’s all over-explaining, with endless sad vibes and no real plot. The MC’s backstory is so over the top tragic it’s hard to take seriously, and the side characters are just props to show how miserable they are. Feels more like the author venting than setting up a story. Cool themes, but they’re hammered in so much they get boring. Nothing really happens, and by the end, you’re wondering what the point even is.

Book is good but theres need to be some few fixes with the pacing cause its like all over the place, the grammar sometimes is too wordy and overwhelming. Good job making the chapters coherent. I dont recommend using heiphens extensively when explaining things cause it sometimes disrupts the flow of the chapter cause heiphens should have an emphasis effect but you sometimes use it for simpler narrations which take away lots of tension,. Some descriptions are sometimes over the top but good job making it this far for this much chapters I guess

Deyyym love the first chap!

The concept is cool af and how the chracters fight is detailed you should put out more chapters heh. But seriously, maybe fix some ways you describe things cause it somestimes goes to point a to point c, so yiu shoud fix it sometimes

Damn that was a nice story! Keep going and It will be better! I'm rooting for ya! Okay so in some parts its like a narration and sometimes its dialogue but Its good

The explanation was clearly expanded and explained, the narration was sewed in like a proper transition, the novel is good, it has good qualities

Dude this is amazing. Small tip though. Erase the heiphens this "— " cause it feels unnatural. Other than that, the whole story is solid. Keep it up