Dantalion34

why not use the ultimate aliens of 5years later from the youtube channel think tank ita pretty much better imo

After rereading this again for the 5th time I'm noticing grammar mistakes and and the dialogue is a bit awkward you can use ai like chatgpt to flesh it out if you want

It's not bad not good either I can tell some parts of it is ripped off from overlord origin in some parts in the gamer arc and the chaotic good fic in the chaloric stone and the ouroboros scene............................................................................................................

I don't blame you this feels like overlord origin but with a few tweaks

A lot of the writing feels riped off on another fic overlord origin as well as chaotic good on the chaloric stone

Is lucian even a divine caster since he has divine saint

keep doing this it's nice to see the more human part of the mc instead of a one dimensional psychopath

Methinks the author reads to Much wuxia

I'd agree I wonder why he is a wannabe Chinese wuxia character

agreed